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DrFunkenstein
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 12:51 pm 
 

I did a big search for one of these, and I couldn't find one. Sorry if it already exists.

Considering how we all enjoy spending time on message boards, I assume that at least some of you are writers as well. Let's talk about what we do. What do you write about? Do you write poetry, articles, essays, short stories, long stories, journal entries, lyrics, or something else entirely? Do you do it professionally at all? Do you have a blog? Post some samples of your work!

I'm trying to make writing my career, and though I'm not particularly successful at it just yet, I enjoy it. I've been blogging fairly hard lately, and in the last few months I've racked up about sixty entries. It's mostly album and concert reviews, with a few opinions on the current state of music. If you're interested, it's http://fuquawi.tumblr.com. If you have a Tumblr too, let's be friends. Or, if there are better blogging sites, let me know. I only know about Tumblr, Blogspot and LiveJournal, and of those I like Tumblr the best, but I'm not exactly wedded to the idea.

I've also started keeping a dream journal, because I read that that's one of the best ways to teach yourself how to lucid dream.
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Necroticism174
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 12:56 pm 
 

Good idea for a thread. I write mostly poetry and lyrics. I've tried my hands at prose but it wasn't really my thing. Here's an example of my stuff:

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Madness
Step into the gloom as it swallows light
I know you're afraid,you don't want to bleed
It rants about mutiny in your ear

We dance to living room rape scenes
Broken glass litters the floor as I groove to the static hum
Of the cracked television screen
I am the modern messiah
Free of a conscience
Mutated and reptilian

I listen to footsteps from the room upstairs
They know that I know
I lie amongst the cockroaches,it stops them from detecting my movements
I know about the government,the destroyers of all
I know about the priests,lusting for infant flesh

Confess your sins to your Gods rotting carcass
See if it makes a difference.

She sits on the covers,left filthy by spent desires
Of all things in this world,she is the most impure
Corrupted by trying to breathe inside this dead machine
She is mine

My insides burn,contorted by a mix of disgust and contamination from the kitchen sink
I heard it whispering about murder in the rain
The end of time will be scripted by our filth
We have nothing good left to die for

I shove my entire hand into her
She doesn't even blink
She sits with empty eyes and hopes these prison walls will show her where it went wrong
As I smear them with liquid death

Her death spasms like multiple nightmare orgasms
They remind me of home
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Markov
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 1:30 pm 
 

Ah, please let this be a short story or something close thread and not a lyrical feedback center, otherwise this might be locked (I hope not)

That being said, I'll post a short story I have tonight after I get back from class. Hopefully some new posts will be here when I get back. :)
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Necroticism174
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 1:32 pm 
 

Well he did include poetry, and that was a poem. But if a Mod has a problem with that and wants to make it more focused and specific, I won't post more.
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Metantoine
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 2:45 pm 
 

I'm writing some fantasy/sci fi short stories but it's in French so I won't have to humiliate myself by posting them!

Also, if you're posting poetry like Necrotism did, use the spoiler option :)
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 2:54 pm 
 

Metantoine wrote:
I'm writing some fantasy/sci fi short stories but it's in French so I won't have to humiliate myself by posting them!

Same here, with the difference that my stuff it's already written, in Spanish, and instead of being fantasy/sci fi, it's Lovecraftian/Stephen King-ish horror. I'd like to write a few short stories in English though (it sounds like an interesting experiment), so if I can come up with anything, I'll certainly post it here.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 3:11 pm 
 

Almost done with my novel, around 210 pages. Looking at publishers, have been for awhile....my freelance work pays off.
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Necroticism174
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 3:18 pm 
 

Right on man, what's it about? Also, any publishers that accept manuscripts from new authors stand out to you? I ask because my best friend has written 4 pretty awesome novels but he hasn't had any luck with that part of the equation.
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Reid
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 5:08 pm 
 

I'm still in high school (senior year), but as of the last couple years I've started writing more and more. Outside of school writing, I have a few short stories down, and am currently in the process of writing what could be a potential novel. I've always had a knack for language and the writing I've done for school has been fairly well-regarded, so it's something I'd definitely would like to continue in college and possibly as a career. Anybody go a similar route? I'm leaning towards majoring in English, getting involved with various publications in college and hopefully finding some job heavily involving writing post-college. Hopefully I'll get further along with submitting and trying to get my own work published by that point as well.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 5:58 pm 
 

I used to write a lot back in high school. I've been too busy living to make a living off writing if you know what I mean, I'm always working or in class, or too intoxicated to sit up straight let alone write like I used to. I still write academic papers for money where I go to school, so I'm still really apt at essays and such, but my fiction skills have seriously diminished.

But Reid, I think I'm in a really similar boat as you. I've always had a gift with language. I was a jock in high school, but I took AP English my junior and senior year, and I scored a 4 both years. It was cool making the same as our valedictorian on our AP exam (actually had a higher average than that chick as far as the actual class went) when everybody was just surprised I even passed let alone excelled.

I've been tossing around ideas for a series of novels for a few years now, but never really got it started. But I will be an author one day. I write a lot of black comedy type stuff. What genre would you say your writing falls under, Reid?
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Reid
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 6:30 pm 
 

Yrael wrote:
What genre would you say your writing falls under, Reid?


I've written a few pieces (most of my short stories) in a fairly serious, post-apocalyptic, quasi-dystopian vein. Writing style very much Stephen King influenced- contemporary, to-the-point, no frills, direct. The longer piece that I'm working on now is a very Kurt Vonnegut/Douglas Adams influenced, fairly ridiculous sci-fi/fantasy satire. Sort of a lighter Hitchhiker's Guide, barring the genius that Adams exudes.

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PhilosophicalFrog
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 9:59 pm 
 

Necroticism174 wrote:
Right on man, what's it about? Also, any publishers that accept manuscripts from new authors stand out to you? I ask because my best friend has written 4 pretty awesome novels but he hasn't had any luck with that part of the equation.


It's a story about a married couple's (late thirties, early forties) loss of their son, the two splitting and the woman left behind in the house, visiting different rooms. It's a lot more complicated than that, but I dun feel like summarizing the emotional rollercoaster it contains :p

But I've already published a good amount of poetry through some magazines and I know a few professors involved in some local printing works, so I will more than likely get published through my university or a poetry press I've already been through. In terms of larger ones accepting n00b manuscripts? Pretty much a no go....it's so damn hard without anything published. If he has short stories or anything, he'd do better trying to get those published by a uni or some smaller indie press or even putting it on feedbooks.com and hoping it gets a lot of downloads, then he is in a position to bargain with powerhouses.
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Necroticism174
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:06 pm 
 

Thanks for the advice, it seems like a pretty fucking tough market to crack. Seems like a lot of people who want to be writers end up just getting a useless English major and teaching.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:09 pm 
 

Yup, that's my path. I've gotten really lucky with freelance work, it's put me in touch with a lot of people in the business, and even then I've ended up writing tourism guides :/

But, for the most part, the internet has made things a lot easier. I really would recommend uploading to feedbooks and either charging directly (sorta a bandcamp for authors....) or retaining rights.

What type of stuff does your bud write? I may know someone who knows someone who specializes in whatever genre.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:10 pm 
 

I'm currently studying Writing at University, and I'm in my last year. I would post up my most recent work, but I just sent it off for marking and I'm not sure if posting it online could compromise my mark. However, here is a short story I wrote last year, that probably needs a lot more rigorous editing - just looking over it now I can see I've come a fair way. The next incarnation of it will probably be the script I'm currently working on with a friend.

(Removed because it is currently on its way to a small online publication)
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:12 pm 
 

Pretty much all of my writing comes from classwork before I graduated, so I've done mostly poetry and essays. I've also got a sci-fi short story I'm fairly confident in.

My sci-fi short story:
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Seven years ago, on December 21st, 2012, the world did not come to a cataclysmic end. Of course, anyone with a brain and a computer would know that the ancient Mayan calendars only signaled the end of an era and the beginning of a new one. And a new era’s exactly what we got. Even though there were no meteors or floods like everyone expected, we instead witnessed an event that was every astronomer’s wet dream turned into a nightmare:

When the sun did as the Mayans commanded and aligned with the center of the galaxy, a large wormhole appeared almost overnight right next door; of course, no one had ever known wormholes to be anything other than a crazy idea in a physics equation, so you can imagine how eager NASA was to haul ass into its depths as soon as ass could be hauled. So far, so good, right? Well, let’s just say things took a turn for the worse from here. Red giant stars tend to ruin everyone’s day.

You see, while NASA was making its preparations to blindly charge into a dimensional detour, the red giant of the Southern Cross constellation, Gamma Crucis (nicknamed Gacrux by the science-types, Big Red to everyone else), decided it was gonna ditch its perch and travel on the freeway to our neighborhood. Yeah, go figure, the wormhole just had to lead straight into Big Red. You can pretty much imagine what happened next—drought, famine, oppressive heat waves, the death of life as we know it, worldwide chaos, political uprising, religious fervor…all that annoying shit. Oh, and our beautiful blue sky is now an eye-straining reddish orangish color.

At least, I think it’s still that god-awful color. It’s hard to tell when you’re locked up. I guess that’s important, isn’t it? Yeah, I’m in the slammer. First-degree murder charges, allegations of conspiracy, and weeks of torture are a real bitch, ya know? Oh, and I suppose it’s also important for you to know my name, what with you being the one I’m telling my story to and all. The name’s Anita. You really don’t need to know much more than that. It doesn’t matter, really. Since the Day of Big Red, a lot of things have changed. But you probably knew that.

You know, I used to be quite the popular girl a few years back, especially right after The Day. It’s true. You wouldn’t believe how high food prices soared in the weeks and months afterward. You also wouldn’t believe how desperately lonely and horny some men can get when Apocalypse is knockin’ on their door. What’s more, you wouldn’t believe what a girl’s gotta do to put food in her belly.

It was a good thing there were so few of us lovely ladies, because some of those guys were quite stingy with their pay. Of course, if any of those bastards thought it was a good idea to leave without paying for the room service, they’d have to apologize to me and my .45, or else I’d be so distraught, I wouldn’t know what to do! I’d have to squeeze a shot into his soft, warm throat just to get my pay. I run a courteous business, and men are simply…disposable. A dime a dozen. All of them just as lonely and horny as the last. Shortage of business was hardly a concern.

Unfortunately, the United World Federation (the newest in a long line of auxiliary puppet governments attempting to maintain order) does not smile upon my justice. In fact, they really don’t approve of anything. To them, the best way to make a good first impression on the 14 million people who still populate the Earth (now known as Gaia, because someone high on the totem pole decided why not) is to send all of their sorry asses to The Suite for any conceivable crime. And if aggravated assault can net you five-to-nine in The Suite, you’d have a rough idea of what blowing someone’s brains out will get you.

Remember those first-degree murder charges I mentioned earlier? You guessed it—some filthy shit named Robby thought he was gonna experience the high life with me and walk away without my requisite fee of 150 Gaian credits. I don’t ask for much, you know. Just enough for a few meals. But, according to him, 5 minutes of my time wasn’t worth the 150 big ones, so he zipped up and went to put his shoes back on. Bullshit, I said. Just because the sonuvabitch couldn’t keep his balls under control doesn’t mean he can break my sacred House Rules.

So, in accordance with the House Rules, as written and kept by yours truly, I gave him a nice new breathing hole in the back of his head. An appropriate end, I must say; a worthless death for a worthless man. Well, to me he was worthless, anyway. Wouldn’tcha know it, those United World Federation goons really don’t like it when one of their own are shot down in a cheap apartment by a Doomsday Whore.

I didn’t just take it lying down, of course. The Suite isn’t my kinda place, ya know? Shit, not even the most desparate cockroaches go near the place. Officially known as the 42nd United World Federation-Commissioned Correctional and Isolation Facility, the cells in The Suite are about as clean and sanitary as a methane junkie’s shit-hovel. If the junkie had been dead for 10 years after inviting his friends over to spray all manner of bodily waste in every direction before a deluge of pus and vomit drowned them while they simultaneously pissed themselves. I was quite determined not to end up in here, but we both can see how well that turned out.

Anyway, I knew the Feds would be on my tail before long (since their oh-so-handy multi-functional BrainComs kinda let the entire department know when something happens to them, such as a sudden case of bullet-induced headaches), so I went further underground. These days, though, everyone was secretly a spy or a snitch or generally didn’t like you, so depending on a safe hidey-hole wasn’t always the best plan. Unfortunately, that was my grand plan. No one’s perfect, ya know. Especially Riley, who I turned to in my hour of need. Big mistake.

I knew her before The Day, and we were pretty good friends. Both worked together in the same truck stop, serving food to your typical degenerates and perverts, and we’d always get together and poke fun at the newest limp-dick-big-britches trucker errand boy who walked in and acted like he was hot shit. Occasionally, during the night shifts when the dumber, drunker guys would stagger in, I’d have to save Riley’s ass from certain defloration.

Long story short, she owed me a few favors, and as luck would have it, I conveniently had one to ask of her. At first, she was glad to help, and a few weeks went by without incident. It was just like old times, both her and I reminiscing about days that weren’t overpowered by sirens and red light, but I should’ve realized it wouldn’t be long before her sweaty fingers dialed up the Feds in a twitchy panic. Riley was always little too pro-government for my tastes, and it seemed a little worldwide cataclysm didn’t do much to change that.

So you can imagine my surprise when I’m sleeping in the guest room, snug as a baby, and all of a sudden, 4 or 5 suits bust into the apartment and shove an auto-taser up my ass without even the courtesy of yelling “Surprise!”

So then they drag me by the ankles and wrists out the door, while Riley gives me a pathetic, simpering look, yelling “I’m sorry, I’m so sorry!” while her tears mix with the snot running down her nose and into her mouth. It’d have hurt a lot less if she simply spat that concoction at me instead of bawling like a little bitch.

My ass was hauled to The Suite that very night, and as a result of the intolerable comedy the United World Federation called the Revised Universal Judicial Procedure Act of 2013, my fair and impartial hearing was a grim reminder of a little thing historians refer to as the Salem Witch Trials. Oh, it would have been all too simple for me to explain that Mr. Robby violated the rules of my humble business, but that was all wrong to the Feds. Clearly I was some sort of assassin sent by the Neo-Arabs or the Independent Military Republic of West Mexico, and my mission was, obviously, to bring down the UWF once and for all. Insults were hurled, instruments were brought out, and it’s safe to say that tendons don’t work very well once they’ve been slashed and hacked. “We only need her mouth working,” they said. I don’t really need to go into the gory details here. It doesn’t really matter, especially when you can’t even move under your own power anymore.

I wish I could say these past 4 years have been eventful, but I haven’t lied to you so far, and I don’t intend to start now. As far as the Feds are concerned, they still haven’t changed their minds about me being some covert spy on some secret mission. From the gossip I’ve heard echoing down the halls, it seems they’ve got their dicks in a frying pan with daily air strikes from the Neo-Arab Rebel Force, so the interrogations have gotten more frequent these past few weeks. The Inquisitorial Squad might get tired of my refusal to sell out my supposed allies soon, so they’ll probably fry me, grind my bones, and serve me up as The Suite’s soup of the day next week, so you understand why I’ve decided to tell my story.

I don’t even know how I’ve managed to write this much without going insane, or even if my story will serve any purpose, but I figured I had to let someone know. Will Gaia even still be around for someone to find these pages? Is there anyone even still alive outside these walls? Hell, will this pile of tattered paper even make it out without being thrown in the open sewer-hole? Even so, I, Anita Rossetti, age 29, high-school graduate, former waitress at Twisted Jim’s Dine ‘n Drive, Doomsday Whore of Federation City Apartment Complex Number 296, have to tell someone my story before they wire me up and fry my ass in the Judgement Seat.

Because these pages are the proof that I exist.


One of my pieces of poetry:
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Journal of the Man Who Has Seen the Sun

Hot again today. Just like yesterday.
And the day before that.
I’m tired of that goddamned sun.
Look at it hovering over us like it owns the place!

Maybe I’ll leave this place—I’ll go to Washington.
The state.
Not the capital.
The state.

I’ll hike in among the dark green deciduous trees.
Or I’ll just sit on my porch and watch the sky all day.
I could even learn to love the rain.

I just don’t ever want to see that hateful, cancerous,
blinding, boiling ball of hot gas again.


This poem was for an assignment which required us to find inspiration in music. This was the result:
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There’s a Revolution Calling You!

“I’ve always known that the mirror never lies.”
- Queensryche (Eyes of a Stranger)


This Friday marks my 17th year here. Almost half my life spent inside,
locked in my cell, sitting right next to my towering reflection in the mirror.
I’ve made a habit out of avoiding that mirror. Don’t really wanna look at myself.
The nurse brings me today’s pills. One addiction for another, I guess. Bottoms up.
They call this place a progressive rehabilitation facility for drugged-up criminals.

My ass. Last I checked, rehab got you off of drugs. Dirty floors stained
with blood and shit, armed pigs at every door, and 17 years of sleeping in a wet,
drafty cell with a black-and-white TV and a toilet…I know a prison when I see one.
You remember Dr. X, that resistance guy on TV? He’s the guilty one, Your Honor.
His stony eyes, his crying needle, and his serpentine tongue took us all by the throat.

And we bought it, all of us. What fools we were. Blind, barely-pubescent fools.
We killed so many under his orders, believing that we could change the world;
now all we have to show for it are the shit-stained cages the State keeps us in.
I’ve made a habit out of avoiding my mirror. What will I see in its smudged glass face?
That’s the last thing I need, to raise my head and stare into the eyes of a stranger.


This poem had to use the so-called "betrayal of expectations" trope, so here goes:
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Another Day at the Office

He returns home from a long day at work, his sweat glistening with pride.
The wife enters, tying her white and spotless apron, “How was work today?”
He sends her a warm smile followed by a sweltering kiss. All had gone well.

He sits at an oak table, and his family surrounds him. The aroma of roast pheasant
tantalizes his nose, seduces his tongue. Now, the golden-brown bird on its altar, the
family prays as he says The Grace. For their sake, he has worked tirelessly today.

That night, he sleeps on a bed of fine white linens. His dreams show him ancient worlds:
his chariot races along the Circus Maximus, the legendary Argo carries him gently
through the seas of time. He awakens the next morning, armed to conquer the day.

Arriving at the facility, smokestacks spewing fire overhead, his friends greet him
with a laugh and a salute. They walk in uniform to their stations under bright red banners.
Everything is in order for today’s shipment as the overloaded train rolls in with a sigh.

From behind a glass wall, he studies the Undesirables, scribbles hastily on a note pad,
and pulls the switch, marveling as transparent hands wrench the life out of them.
He sends his coworkers a slashing, straight-armed salute. Another job well done.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:13 pm 
 

@ PhilosophicalFrog:
His first two books were very much Bukowski type affairs, his third book was a bleak post-apocalyptic novel (which was pretty damn good), his fourth book was kind of like American Psycho meets The Stranger. So somewhat diverse, but mostly dark stuff. I'll let him know about feedbooks.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:20 pm 
 

Another poem of mine:

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High Soul

Love,hate,and failure screaming in my brain
Self-medicate to rid myself of the pain
The pain of knowing the place where dead flowers bloom
I hear the howling wind moaning my doom

We jive to the rhythm of damnation beneath the moon

A third grade abortionist,violent contortionnist
I have more psychosis than your neighborhood psychologist
Led into the heart of the sun,temporary ultraviolet bliss
Followed by burning wings and a plummet into emptiness

Trippin' slow technicolor death in this narcotic haze
Take me back to better days
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:22 pm 
 

Seeing another literature thread pop up makes me want to continue my science fiction story.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 10:35 pm 
 

Here's a story I submited for my College Art magezine but it was too long so it didn't make it. I'm actually looking for some horror magezines to submit it too. Any sugjestions?

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These Entries are from a Diary of a 9 year old girl who was found in the red level zone SE5 and from a Commander of a Military Outpost and Chief Civilian Guardian who led the unite that found her. Note that this is a cleaned version of her writings; they were originally badly written, spelled and worded. The fallowing is her entries after she left her safe haven into the uncharted lands and the Commanders words after discovering her. Both are currently being evaluated for the archives.

Diary 44
Well, it’s finally come to this, Stacy and I have so little food left that we have had to leave the compound. We both hugged each other and cried when we came to the choice we feared about so much, but its better then fooling ourselves to think we can stay and manage to make ourselves last any longer. I really don’t want to leave, and not just because of the smelly monsters that want to eat us.

I was only a little girl when it all began years ago, our family was lucky that we managed block off our land and make it large enough to farm. There was Mommy, Daddy, Uncle Jerry, Aunt Margaret, My older brother Tom, and my twin cousins Mary and Kerry, and me, little Ericka who was the youngest of them by 15 years. And despite being trapped, we managed to gather some happiness in our blocked off home.

Then just over a year after it started and we hid, I found Stacy, dirty and hiding in the Brocken down truck. I convinced her to come out and join all of us, but when I showed her to everyone else, they all looked confused and concerned. I think it was just them shocked that she got over the walls, but they never truly seemed to accept her.

Daddy, Uncle Jerry and Tom thankfully would grow extra food and carefully can and jar it, I wonder if they knew something like this was going to happen. Then 2 years ago, one of the monsters broke through the wall and they managed to stop them and fix it, but not before Kerry had gotten bitten. She never said anything, and before we could find out, she managed to get to everyone but Stacy and me who were hiding in our spot. Mommy and Daddy managed to take care of the rest and then took care of themselves before they became the monsters. They did it so well that I don’t know where they rest now, and really, I don’t want know.

We managed to live off of the spare food they had saved for so long, but now we barely have any left, we now have to pack them and go and find someone else. I’m scared to go out there with the monsters, but Stacy as always makes me feel brave. I hope this is a good idea.

Diary 45
Mommy and Daddy always said there was a god; despite the monsters and everything that has happened, now I really believe he’s there. Stacy and I have occasionally spotted one of the human like monsters out there, but we’ve managed to stay low and keep going. We nearly screamed in excitement when we snuck really close without being found, but remembered to stay as quit as possible.

These Last few days, we’ve made wonderful discoveries. First we found a house and after carefully looking, we found it was empty. While it was empty of food, it had a huge bed and Stacy and I got to sleep in the most comfy bed we’ve ever had. It was dusty, but we enjoyed it so much.

Then after we continued on, we came across a small river with a calm spot. The water was a little cold, but it felt so good to go swimming. Before we just swam in the part of the creek that went through the heavily fenced part of the wall, it was shallow and we hardly floated there. This we could swim back and forth and at one point we even risked laughing out loudly.

We then came upon a tree that had apples in it. We recognized them from one of Mommy’s and Aunt Margaret’s Cooking Books. We climbed up carefully and ate them in the tree. It was such an amazing taste; I hope we can eat more eventually.

The best part of all is that early today, we found a map showing us where we are, and then we saw there was a City close. There might be people there to help us. We have this map now and we’re going to fallow the road that’s called an Interstate Highway. I just know going to the City is right.

Diary Entry 46

All the fun we’ve had is gone. We’re slowly running short on the food; we only have about 4 cans left and 8 packages of smoked jerky. Water is also becoming low, Mommy and Daddy taught us that we can’t just drink any water, we have to carefully clean it and we forgot the tools we need. We only have a bottle and half, and we’re getting thirstier as we travel.

Worst yet, Stacy nearly got grabbed by a monster nearly under a car, thankfully it had no legs so we could run. We’re noticing more and more monsters as we travel, and it’s harder to hide.

I’m starting to miss home.

Diary Entry 47
I can’t sleep tonight at all. We were carefully traveling down the road this morning, but then we came to a bridge. When we looked below, we saw a lot of monsters and they instantly came after us. We went into what was called a theatre; I remember hearing about them during story time.

It was in here that we saw for the first time people who weren’t family. They were way up high in this hole in the wall with seats, they had guns and where firing behind them, I think at Monsters.

One of them saw us and they all turned to call at us, telling us they’d come down for us and we’d be safe. Me and Stacy hugged in such excitement, feeling like we’ve finally been saved. But when I looked up they had a look of confusion and weren’t excited to see us anymore. That look they gave us reminded me of something.

Then suddenly, the Monsters came up from behind and took them down. We didn’t see them, but the sounds I heard made me cry. We ran up onto the area I think was a stage, and hid in a room with mirrors a lot of mirrors in it. We managed to find a metal tube thing and climb up. The monsters came to the hole we went in and reached for us, and I nearly slipped, but Stacy above me told me I could make it and I did.

We’re now on top of the building, Stacy’s asleep but I can’t even close my eyes, I can’t stop hearing the screams.

Diary Entry 48
We’re still up on top of the roof and we’ve been up here a day now, soon we’re going to try and slid down a pipe on the side, hopefully we can get down and continue on down the road. I noticed yesterday while looking out that I could see buildings, really big ones, I think that’s the City. I’m afraid to continue, the farther we go the more bad it gets, but we don’t know where else to go.

Diary Entry 49
After thinking hard, I suddenly know where I’ve seen that look the people in the theatre had. It was the same look everyone had when I discovered Stacy and showed her to everyone. I’m more confused now, and I’m kind of mad.

Everyone back home was never nice to Stacy. Whenever they called for me, they always ignored Stacy, never inviting her to Dinner, or Bathe, or Bed, or Stories. Stacy would tell me it’s OK, but I wouldn’t allow it and I would yell at them.

I don’t know why the people where looking at us the same way, like they didn’t like Stacy being with me, it just makes me more mad. Stacy is my best friend. She’s always been there for me, she hardly eats any of the food so I can have more and every time I’m writing my diary, she’s keeping guard. She’s doing that right now in fact.

But still, I didn’t want them to die, just like I didn’t want anyone at home to die. I really don’t know what to feel right now. Except scared, I know I feel that. I hope tomorrow when we enter the City that I stop being scared.

Diary Entry 50
If anyone can find this Diary, I want you to know I’m not going to be angry that you read it.

Stacy and I finally made it to the city, with no food, hardly any water left and hoping that there would be some people to help us. It was nothing like we wanted. It was empty with cars and garbage everywhere. It was silent in a scary kind of way. Our necks also hurt from looking up so much, the buildings are so much taller than a tree; I wonder if they got to a place they called Outer Space.

When we turned around, we suddenly saw monsters coming after us slowly, more then we could count. We instantly ran for cover, but every door we tried was either locked or brock open with Monsters already inside. The farther down we ran, the more monsters came out after us.

We finally found a large truck and climbed up it. On its back was a metal box like thing with no top on it. We fell into it with sand and are now trapped. I’m writing this now in the back, Stacy is holding me from behind. I can hear them bang and try to crawl up the sides. I think one is soon going to climb inside and when that happens; I don’t know what we’re going to do when that happens.

We screamed for help but it didn’t do any good. Me and Stacy then relies that no one is here, and no one is going to save us. So that’s why I’m writing this last entry, I want someone to know our story of how we made it here. If what my family have said is true, then I’ll be seeing them soon as well.

All I have left to say is that I’m so glad that Stacy and I made this trip. Despite how I loved Mommy and Daddy and everyone else, I can’t thi-

Diary Entry 51
I can’t believe this has all happened. We’re no longer in danger. We have food, fresh food, different food I’ve never eaten before. We have beds, not as big or as comfy as the one in the house we stayed in, but they’re fresh and clean. And above all else, we’re surrounded by bigger, heavier and more solid walls with people more ready to fight the monsters.

When I was last writing this journal, I thought for sure the monsters where going to climb in and get us. Then all we heard was banging from guns, guns that fired many more shots than the guns we had back at home, and louder too. Someone once screamed to get down, and then there was a huge explosion that made hearing hard. They’ve told me now it was called a Grenade.

We tried to climb up and out, but couldn’t so we screamed. Finally someone heard us and they opened the back of the box. The doors swung open and the sand cam flowing out. The men and women were wearing all black outfits and had giant black guns. They grabbed me and pulled me away towards a large machine with spinning blades. I noticed no one was helping Stacy and she had to keep up on her own, but we were both so relieved to be escaping we didn’t care. The most amazing part was that we flew out. Flew like a bird. I had heard stories from Mommy and Daddy but I never believed it until now.

This new home is amazing as well; I the people here have bathed me with cleaning stuff that makes me look pretty, has cut my tangled hair short and given me new clothes. While I want to like them, I’m also confused since they have done what everyone else did, they look at me and Stacy with the same confused look that everyone else had.

I would be mad but thankfully Mr. Gregor has been nice and demand people around us acknowledge Stacy more often. I really like Mr. Gregor, he said he’s in charge of everyone here and he’s also supposed to make sure people like Stacy and me are kept safe. He also wants to see my diary after this; he said our story is so amazing that he wants to make a copy of it for everyone to read.

Even though I’m told to stay on my toes, that the danger is still there, I now feel freer than ever. I’m well protected, more and different foods, new clothes and way more space than our home had. My only regret is that Mommy, Daddy and everyone else was here with us, I even cried a little last night thinking about it. But at least I have one person who has never left me, and that’s Stacy. I would never have gotten here if not for her, and I can’t think of any other way to do it then with her at my side.

Commander’s Journal: 13th of April, 6 years after Outbreak
I have been a commander for 4 and half years of this outpost and I have seen some truly amazing sights, both encouraging and depressing. However, the case of the child we have found is one for the ages. I have seen a great many things from survivors in the red zones, some committing suicide after seeing there salvation is nothing more than a compound on 24 hour watch, others wanting to go back out alone like a lone cowboy to kill more zombies since killing them are there new obsession .

But this is the case that I will never forget, and neither should anyone else.

At 1647 hours, 6 days ago, one of our censors picked up warm blooded movement with the size of a human, so we were prepping a small team to go out and fetch them. However, we then got confirmation that the human was the average size of a child. Leading the operation, I ordered a team of 25 soldiers to accompany on this, 3 times larger than average.

The Helicopter ride there was a truly long wait, as it took us 38 minutes to make it to the location we had seen them. After searching, we found a large hoard of Zombies and knew they had been spotted, and that was when the fear really sunk in. After destroying god knows how many sacks of rot, we then heard screaming from a Semi-Truck with a cargo area holding sand and gravel. We opened it, and freed the child. As we flew off with all troopers in the 3 choppers with no casualties, I couldn’t help but feel pride for what we did. Then I looked back and saw the child hugging thin air and telling nothing “We’ve made it”.

As the child was checked medically, I found her personal Journal…or Diary, and read through it. From what I’ve gathered, this is what has happened in this child’s lifetime.

Ericka lived with her family on their farm, and her family managed to build a large barrier around it so they could still farm enough food to survive the coming years. At 4 years of age (a year after outbreak), Ericka suddenly began to have an Imaginary friend named Stacy. At first, her family would allow this to happen since she was young and presumably to help her deal with the reality she was in.

To their surprise, this didn’t end, and Stacy became more and more real to Ericka throughout the years. Eventually a zombie broke through their defense and infected a family member, spreading and leaving only Ericka left as the infected members dealt with the infection through the “mercy route” as we’ve dubbed it.

Alone now, Ericka would have only Stacy and her……or “they”, managed to last nearly 2 years until low food supply forced them to leave. Through smart thinking and sometimes sheer luck, they made it to the ruins of Seattle where we found her…or “them”.

Now rationally I along with everyone would think she should be snapped out of this imaginary friendship, she constantly demands that Stacy be acknowledged along with her. But Despite what my lowers think…..I’m allowing her to keep her friend.

As I said earlier, I’ve seen men and women crack from the harsh reality of what has been laid upon our world, some snapping to the point where there mental state is worse than the zombies out there. This child survived it all simply by having a friend, even if it was one in her head. She’s alive and well, after journeying what we think is at least over 80 miles with no protection. As to what will happen later in her life, I don’t know. Someday at some point we might have to make her face reality. But for now, I feel she’s earned her friend.

After she finishes her Diary tonight, I’ll be collecting it and trying to translate it for filing, and then send versions to protective facilities. I know the air transport system for information is to be used for absolute need to know and this is questionable NTK Information, but it’s a story I feel best be preserved, it could be an inspiration for years to come.

Rob Gregor, Commander of the Olympia Compound and officer of the UCG (United Civilian Guardians)

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 11:01 am 
 

Not bad Aurone, although I think you could do more with the language to make it feel like the diary of a nine year old, cause at the moment it doesn't really come across that way. I like the twist though, and the sentiment is really cool - I think with a few more drafts this could be a really killer story, although I already enjoy it as it is.
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 1:32 pm 
 

I graduated from college last May with a degree in Creative Writing but it seems like I've only been able to write reviews and the very occasional poem/story since then. I have several short story and novel ideas that I want to work with but I'm struggling to find the motivation to work through it. Of course, I'm also doing a lot more reading this year and am still in the process of finding my own style. I just hope I can finish something good by the end of the year...
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 1:40 pm 
 

Nice job, Aurone, I rather liked it, even though it was a bit too predictable for my taste.

Also, I lol'd at when the man wrote/said "The Fallowing" right after saying that 9-year old girls can't spell :lol:
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 2:59 pm 
 

That's just my shitty spelling. If I go anywhere with this, the saving grace is that an editor will work something with it.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 4:29 pm 
 

ahh, you didn't mean to insinuate a field was plowed and yet still unseeded?
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 9:02 pm 
 

I'm currently writing my autobiography. Here is an excerpt:

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One day I decided to lobby in congress for America's most persecuted minority: white, straight, male, christian job creators! After a fifteen minute presentation in congress, they agreed to my demands! They immediately rattified the bill I had conveniently already written which lowered the tax rates of all billionaires to zero percent and outlawed all regulations! The next day, I became a corporate raider and pump'n'dumped every American corporation and outsourced every American job overseas! The American people were outraged and about to protest, but unfortunately no one read the 8000 page bill and noticed the provision that makes opposing me illegal on pain of death! Based on this principle of law, which was upheld by by the Roberts Supreme Court, I declared myself dictator of America for life! I instantly waged pointless wars of aggression against all nations which destroyed America's army and led to it's conquest by a united global front! At the last peace negotiation before America was absolutely defeated, I demanded that the allied forces unconditionally surrender and declare me emperor of the world! They rejected my proposal based on the fact that my army had been completely annihilated and they had over a billion troops ready to pour in at a moments notice! Before Washington was sacked, I snuck out of the Whitehouse in the middle of the night carrying a suitcase full of gold bars and escaped to Pakistan, America's only remaining ally, where I peacefully retired and walked off into the sunset!
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 9:10 pm 
 

I see....that...was...awful....
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 9:28 pm 
 

Don't listen to him man! It gave me a half hard on from the sheer cleverness and brightened my day. John_SUNLIGHT indeed.
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 9:56 pm 
 

:lol: I was only half-joking. It wasn't terrible...just...wasn't very good satire, and the writing style irked me. It was like the author was too aware of his jokes, and it ceases to become satire or parody and starts becoming obnoxious. Like people who hammer home jokes. Subtlety is a really good thing.
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Sometimes I get the feeling MA doesn't appreciate my writing. Here is another sample to convince the unbelievers:

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One day I constructed my ultimate fortress, "Alamut 2: Death To The Weak"! The walls were fifty miles tall, constructed of mile wide granite blocks that only a being of cyclopian power could have placed! Apparently, the entire world had a problem with this as the cite I'd chosen to construct my fortress was Manhatten Island! The United States responding by sending a group of losers known as the United States Marines to take me down! Apparently they sent all of them! Shortly upon their arrival, they saw that my battlements were manned by the ghosts of every soldier burried in Arlington Cemetary, who's graves and bones I had used as mortar to build my fortress! This had the dual purpose of providing a solid foundation and also it made the ghosts my slaves! The marines were mowed down and I forced the ghosts to pick up their bones and use them to make more mortar and conscript more ghost slaves! I had my taliban allies whip the ghosts with special ectoplasm whips to make them work harder and to make the experience more horrible for them! Later, after hundreds of fighters and bombers failed to climb high enough and slammed into my fortress as super sonic speeds, I decided that running a fortress was boring and sabotaged the underworld, causing it to sink in an atlantean catastrophie and sending the ghosts to their eternal, watery misery! After this, I walked off into the sunset!
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 10:19 pm 
 

You seem to really like walking off into the sunset. :-P

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 12, 2012 8:50 am 
 

All your characters seem to not know many forms of punctuation, and yes, walking off into the sunset :lol:

I like the brief description, though, it gives a short of fucked-up kind of feeling when all these supposedly things go on while the character seems happy and whatnot.
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 12, 2012 9:25 am 
 

I've been writing a lot of poetry for the past year, though I won't dare to post any of it here :P haha. I've been wanting to start writing short stories, but I have little motivation and no worthwhile ideas.

I was never really interested in literature/writing until my honors English class last year, when my teacher forced us to appreciate poetry. I had the highest grades in his class and was supposed to take AP English this year, but my schedule got fucked up and I was placed in a regular English class. I enjoy the class, but I would prefer the challenge of AP. I'm considering a minor in English when I go to college, in hopes that I can write while pursuing a career in biology.
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 12, 2012 9:36 am 
 

See, I think it's too on the nose. There's a time and place for bluntness, but it seems off and forced here. The use of exclamation points really makes it seem like someone laughing at their own joke before they finish, making the end of it more annoying than funny.

Basically, it reads like the author is trying way too hard.
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Here is my short story that I wrote for class. (Keep in mind that this is a Sophomore English II class, and I figured the profanities, mutilation, and rape would keep people paying attention, more or less :thumbsup: )

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"Personal Diary Entries from the log of... Why am I lying to myself. I have lost my name now. It's something I don't need anymore. I'm writing these entries to show people what I have done, so that the evidence may become much clearer than it really is. When you "high-class detectives" are reading this, remember that the most obvious culprit is usually the first."


Shane lit a cigarette and took a long drag.

"I'd be more impressed if that was a shitting hole."
Said Shane with scorn and distaste in his voice.

"Ah, yeah? Why'd you come out here then?"

"Well, I made the god-awful mistake of trusting any of you with the idea that you may actually know where a decent swimming hole may be."

"Yeah, that was your first mistake."

Julie hit Mike, further proving her dominance over him.

"Shut up, both of you, and help us find the car, it's getting dark, for fuck's sake."

Shane and Mike know when to shut up, especially when Julie is angry, and the fact that they were wet and lost in the woods did not help calm her in the slightest.
The crowd in front of them only turned around for a second to see them squabbling, but continued to push on forward in hopes of finding a car.
Shane rubbed his Rabbit's foot, the only thing to give him solace within these kind of times, and pushed forward, flicking off his cigarette into the forest floor, that was littered with even more previous cigarettes.

The moon shone now, casting it's auras and colors over the groves and branches of the woods. A peaceful night only interrupted by the footsteps of humans, haunting the animals as though they were the casting sound of a prophecy to come. Oaken groves swayed among the Missourian planes, and the wind hinted at the seasons of Autumn to come.
Only crickets and hares looked forward, to see a group of two-legged creatures sulking forward. The hares stood still, waiting for the humans to go by. After what must have seemed an eternity to them, the humans were gone. However, to their dismay, they felt the presence of another's footsteps, and stood still for a second eternity.

Shane was out of cigarettes. This was a bad thing for the group, since Shane gets the rage of a hormonal teenage girl when he does not have his cigarettes.
Just as he was about to open his mouth, Julie looked back at him, signaling that she would close his mouth if he uttered one word. Mike stared back and smirked a little, while slaughtering away a mosquito on his shoulder.

The trio stopped in their tracks when everyone else did. Ahead, the group circled around something, and one of them seemed to be quivering.

"Someone call an ambulance!"
A girl called out.

"Please, no, I don't like this! Take me home Steven. Now! This isn't funny!"

The trio went towards Rebbecca's calls, knowing that she easily gets startled at anything, so they figured someone must've pulled a prank on her, as the usual fare.
But this was probably this most ridiculous prank yet, anyone would jump like Rebbecca did once they saw this. Even Julie backed up.

Among a crow, lied beneath a man. It became hard to see with all these dancing shadows and silhouettes, Mike went forward, seeing that this was not mere prank, the body was completely mutilated.
The arms stuck out, lying out of their sockets, basked in their own blood. The blood danced down into the earth, and this exchange was near the torso, where the ribcage of the man was completely open and the liver and organ systems grew their ways into the surroundings. There were knife marks and blood-induced bruises.

Shane vomited. The stench coming off the carcass was unbearable. To him, it represented a deliberate mix of feces, vomit, and rotting meat.
Julie tried to help Shane up, but he pushed her away with his well-built arms.

The next series of events I cannot describe without tears and suicidal thoughts in my mind. Death was so swift in this event that the people involved probably passed from this world without even realizing how they died.
I'll try to be as specific as possible, for you nice people.

There was a man in front of the groups, he had told everyone to not look at the body and come with him. Completely thinking that the man was insane, the group did no such thing. They even backed up a little, crushing leaves behind them.

"This was an act of one of the most dangerous tribes around these parts, and frankly, I don't even know why you people are going in the woods anyway."
He pulled out a silver gun. Rebbecca screamed again, with more confusion than fright.
The man pointed his gun towards the eastern side of the woods, away from the group, and pulled the trigger. From the groves fell a shadow, with metallic clanking sounds that echoed throughout the forest.

"This is your murderer. He goes off and kills just for the sheer sexual pleasure of it, and to bring fresh-kill for his group. He and his kin are scum."
There was a sound that echoed through the forest. It sounded like what could be described as a knife making the first cut into a bread loaf.
Then there was another.
And another.

One by one, two bodies fell. Sighting the flights, three fell forward, one with another metallic clank.

Well, at this point, there were three dead, with what I assumed to be knives, considering I threw all three of them. I still can't believe they didn't see me. That man with the gun was a bad man. He gave the tribe of the forest a bad name, and took an innocent life. I know, you're probably laughing at my hypocrisy right now. They all deserved to die.

After hours on end of relentless slaughter, limbs hung from tree branches, casting obscure shadows into the night. The place smelled of death, and oh, how I love that scent. It's a shame that I will not be able to ever experience it again.

After the quakes, there was a silhouette next to a decaying carcass which had probably laid there for a good day or so. I dropped my pants and ripped off hers. I thrusted my waist onto hers, with the desire of only pleasuring myself. "She" was not a she anymore. She was a tool for my pleasure. In fact, I figured that her identity was better lost. I took out my knife and opened her eyelids. That's when I realized she was still alive. Her eyeballs twitched with fear, hoping I would not notice her living. I didn't want her to live through the shame, but I also wanted to satisfy my lust. With fear myself, I lunged my knife into her face. Nearly twenty times of the sound of orgiastic pleasure and metal meeting flesh happened. She did not scream. She could not scream. I had hoped she had choked on her own blood by now, so that she may not see this. So I made sure she didn't. I carved out her eyeballs, starting with the pupils, and crushed them with my hands to rub them across her naked body and pale white breasts. I continued to do this for nearly half the day.

To whom it may concern, carry the memories that were written here, for I cannot. I am too weak and am dead now, my blood mixed with hers, as my skull is probably rolled off somewhere in the distance. My identity will be revealed to you very fast, but it is up to you whether you'd carry the burden of this. From my left leg, hangs a Rabbit's foot. I always loved that little charm. I'll love it forever, just as I loved everyone human on this earth. My love isn't for this world of culture, however. I leave you with no forgiveness as I smoke my last cigarette.
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Its cool that so many of you write, I'll check your stories/poems out when I have more time. I mostly write lyrics, been doing them since I was eleven or twelve. I've gotten pretty good (but I guess I'm more than a little biased.) I'm pretty good at writing essays, had a 93.5 average in the last year of highschool because I only took courses that involved writing lots of essays. I wrote a few short stories for my writer's craft course, most of them are comedy, but I did write two serious short stories which I think are pretty good. One was about a teenager growing up in an unnamed South American slum. The other was about a street criminal who goes to jail and starts hunting when he gets out. I'm thinking of starting a music blog, as this site is great for writing metal reviews, but I'd also like to explore writing reviews/articles about other genres.

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Now that I'm thinking about it, I should probably give a few examples of my scholarly writing as well.

Here's an essay on Doctor Faustus from my Brit Lit class, demonstrating Marlowe's subversive undertones:
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That Demon Totally Symbolizes Peace and Love: Understanding
Marlowe’s Unorthodox Intentions in Doctor Faustus

Christopher Marlowe’s The Tragical History of Doctor Faustus is one of the quintessential dramas of the Renaissance, dealing with religious issues like free will and demonology that were hot topics in the late 16th century. However, as time goes on, many scholars have come up with new ideas as to what Marlowe’s intentions were with his masterwork. This is a good thing, though, because prompting discussion is a good thing for the academic community, and can only serve to deepen understanding. Therefore, I will be looking at two scholarly articles written about Doctor Faustus, summarize them, and then offer my own analysis, which will culminate into a look at how all three interpretations complement each other.

The first text is an article by Suzan Last called “Marlowe’s Literary Double Agency: Doctor Faustus as a Subversive Comedy of Error,” which appears in the 24th volume of Renaissance and Reformation, and it serves to interpret the play as a parody; “[b]y parody I mean, not the traditionally conceived mocking of evil to be found in conventional morality plays, but a subversion of that very convention, creating a turnabout in the ideology expected of a typical morality play” (24). Unfortunately, most of the scholarly community disregards the comedy in Doctor Faustus, because much of it is perceived to be added in by various writers to make the play more popular in what is called the 1616 “B-Text” of Doctor Faustus, contrasted with the 1604 “A-Text” which was written earlier and didn’t include much of the comedic scenes, but it was a man named W.W. Greg who argued that the comic scenes in the B-Text were, in fact, very much in Marlowe’s style and were based on his English Faust Book source (24). So, in a strange twist of fate, the A-Text, the version that was written earlier and is much more somber in content, is the abridged version while the B-Text, full of bawdy humor and parody, was actually the version with the most critical authority!

Despite its authority, Last tells us that critics still refuse to give the B-Text any sort of critical agency because the comic scenes supposedly detract from the deeper themes of the play. While many big-name critics have settled into the “A-Text Camp,” Last stands strong with the B-Text, stating that she believes that, more so than the A-Text, it “effectively demonstrates how Marlowe reshaped the ideology of the morality play and of conventional tragedy by giving them a comic sensibility, creating an essentially questioning and subversive form of drama” (25-26). From here, she spends a while commenting on the challenges Marlowe had to overcome to create said comic sensibility along with his subversive intentions. For example, outright parody of religious doctrine was dangerous during the Reformation, so Marlowe would have had to hide his parody “with a mask of orthodoxy” (27). Last also points out the brevity of the play’s epilogue, pointing out its use of alliteration and its description of “unlawful” knowledge and heavenly power basically showing the church’s imposition of limitations on the people (31). The result is that the epilogue uses more burlesque language and poetic devices to put less emphasis on the moral we’re supposed to learn, almost as if it was a last-minute decision, just because an epilogue that tells us “Don’t do it!” is merely what ought to be said to not let the play end on vicious parody of the church (31).

The remainder of Last’s article points out more examples of Marlowe’s subversive themes, which are worth reading, but for the purposes of this essay, this is as far as we need to go to understand Last’s point that Marlowe heavily parodied orthodox beliefs while hiding under a guise of orthodoxy in his infamous B-Text of Doctor Faustus. For this article in particular, I agree with the ideas that Last raises about Marlowe subverting orthodox doctrine with his silly comic scenes and his only-there-to-please-the-churchgoers epilogue. Having read the B-Text of the play, I must agree that it is a more complete and comprehensive text than an edition without the comic scenes would be, and I couldn’t imagine the A-Text being very interesting or subversive without them. I was also quite suspicious of the epilogue when I first read it, because Marlowe put great effort into the play that precedes it, filling it with very verbose verse, and the epilogue’s brevity and obligatory moral was startling, to say the least.

Our second text is called “Imperialism as Devilry: A Postcolonial Reading of Doctor Faustus,” which appears in a festschrift known as Doctor Faustus: A Critical Guide, written by one Toni Francis. In this essay, Francis states that it’s not the church that Marlowe is criticizing; rather, it’s England’s rampant colonialism that is the subject of the story (“In Doctor Faustus, ‘the devil’ indeed wears many hats.”) (111). After her introduction, Francis gives us a detailed account of England’s imperialist activities, from extensive pirating of Spanish ships to forceful colonization of the Americas. Much time is spent on this history lesson, but it is not in vain—it is imperative that we know the extent of England’s drive for power in order to understand Francis’ historical interpretation of Doctor Faustus and its anti-imperialistic themes.

After we learn about the colonial escapades of Queen Elizabeth and her pirate gang, Francis dives right on into the main idea of her essay by saying, “The majority of critical analyses of necromancy and witchcraft in Marlowe’s Doctor Faustus have remained focused on religious or philosophical issues, with few alternative treatments of the metaphorical significance of Faustus’s decision” (114). She points out that one leading interpretation which doesn’t focus on the religious or philosophical is that Faustus can be seen as a metadramatical playwright, while another popular interpretation begs the question whether Faustus really became a practitioner of magic or not (114-15). Francis then comments that, while Faustus claims necromancy is the last great intellectual challenge, the notion of necromancy all but dissipates when Mephistopheles enters the picture (117). Necromancy seems to be at the center of the story, but we never see any actual practicing of magic or any magical rituals (Mephistopheles seems to arrive because of Faustus’ spell, but he arrived to claim his soul, not to follow his orders), so it becomes obvious to Francis that necromancy is really just a cover for a deeper idea: “I question whether this play was ever meant to probe the actual practice of dark magic, or whether necromancy—and more specifically, selling one’s soul to the devil—can be interpreted as a metaphor for a more contemporary form of soul-selling—that is, England’s violent and gluttonous domination. . .as England’s descent into Hades” (117-18).

She follows this thought up with examples from the play, as any good scholar would, particularly displaying Faustus’ imaginations of England’s colonies and the riches they contain. Francis raises the point that, while Faustus claims that knowledge is his prime goal, it’s actually wealth and power that drives him—this should be sending up red flags and alarm bells with the words ‘Imperial England’ inscribed on them to the reader at this point (118). Faustus merely wants control over goods and people, and his previous obsession over knowledge was either a cover-up or a vehicle he planned on using to obtain said control. In the last pages of this article, Francis drives her point home by including the greatest colonizer mentioned in the play: Lucifer himself. The entire soul-selling deal being a metaphor for colonialism becomes obvious when Francis states: “Faustus’s deal with Mephistopheles is also closely linked to colonization in the play. Lucifer, a colonizer of souls, constantly attempts to ‘enlarge his kingdom’. After the signing of the contract, Mephistopheles asks Faustus, ‘shall I have thy soul?’ adding, ‘And I will be thy slave’, thereby suggesting that Faustus, in selling his soul, assumes the role of the slaver” (120). In other words, when Faustus subscribes to the imperialism of Lucifer, he gains power over his very own personal demon slave, Mephistopheles—the metaphor should be obvious at this point, especially considering that, while Marlowe was writing, England was constantly founding new colonies, reaping the benefits of wealth, and exerting its power over its inhabitants. The very fact that Faustus’ language is wrought with images of power and domination, mostly in the context of the play’s phony necromancy, is especially damning in light of his role as a symbol of English imperialism.

I must also agree with the points Francis makes in her article, because I find her analysis of Faustus as an imperialist figure simultaneously enlightening, amusing, and interesting. While I’m not sure if I subscribe to her ‘imperialism is the one and only thing necromancy can be linked to and that’s final!’ approach, I can certainly understand it as another vital interpretation of a text like Doctor Faustus which contains many, many symbolic riches for scholars to mine and quarry. And as I mentioned, the history lesson in the first few pages may seem like it goes on forever, but it was good to know in order to understand the article; but then again, isn’t it always a good thing to understand historical events and the movements they influence, anyway? On that note, I suppose it’s time to bring my own interpretation into the fray, because I, too, have opinions as to what Marlowe intended with Doctor Faustus.

In my interpretation, Doctor Faustus is a cautionary tale regarding the nature of humanity, seeking knowledge and power merely for the sake of having knowledge and power, displaying how greed and recklessness will ultimately lead us to our untimely ends. The introduction of the play makes Faustus look like an honorable scholar, seeking knowledge to make the world a better place; however, he learns quickly that human knowledge and human power have their limits, but that’s not going to dissuade this hungry mind from the knowledge he seeks! While Faustus seeks knowledge to make great strides for the sake of humanity at first, his true intentions become very obvious very quickly when he begins his pursuit of necromancy: “All things that move between the quiet poles / Shall be at my command” (1.1.55-56). In fact, when Faustus makes the deal with the devil to obtain the power he seeks, his first impulse is to tell Mephistopheles, “I charge thee wait upon me whilst I live, / To do whatever Faustus shall command,” asserting his power the very second he believes he obtains it (1.3.35-36).

So now that Faustus has this incredible power and can theoretically do anything he wants with it, he settles for asking Mephistopheles questions about the heavens instead of, you know, actually visiting them. All this phenomenal cosmic power, and the best thing he can think to do is ask a servant demon questions he doesn’t even know the answers to! And if you think that’s a waste of power, then the scene where Faustus and Mephistopheles play tricks on the Pope is cause enough for any reader to grind their teeth in frustration:

MEPHISTOPHILIS. To make his monks and abbots stand like apes,

And point like antics at his triple crown,

To beat the beads about the friars’ pates,

Or clap huge horns upon the cardinals’ heads,

Or any villainy thou canst devise,

And I’ll perform it, Faustus. Hark, they come! (3.2.83-88)

The use of the word ‘villainy’ is especially irritating, because with the powers of all the demons and all of Hell behind him, calling Faustus’ tricks on the Pope ‘villainy’ is entirely ludicrous, and only serves to further prove how Faustus has squandered his power for the sake of petty amusements and parlor tricks. Of course, the frustration the reader feels towards Faustus is well-founded, but Marlowe could be asking: could we do any better if it were ourselves who held such power? Thus, why I and possibly many others refer to Doctor Faustus as a cautionary tale: if such an intelligent man like Faustus can be sidetracked into playing goofy pranks with his infinite power, then we, too, would be suckered into such trivial acts. While necromancy and the divine are definitely things humanity wasn’t meant to mess around with, Marlowe could also be extrapolating this lesson to also mean that absolute power was also never meant to be wielded by mankind. As the saying goes, absolute power corrupts absolutely.

All three of these interpretations deal with entirely separate issues, but I believe that they all tackle the same idea: the concept of necromancy, as it appears in Doctor Faustus, is merely a façade used to tackle other issues. Whether you want to say that Marlowe was making fun of the Church, or that he was equating demonology to imperialism, or that he was telling us to mind our limitations, you’re always going to be right on some level. And after all, that’s part of what makes Doctor Faustus a great play instead of just a good play: a good play will service you with memorable characters and dialogue, while a great play will provide those things as well as provide some food for thought to all those who attend. Some may not be able to digest their meal, while others will find many subtle tastes and textures to enjoy.

Works Cited
Francis, Toni. “Imperialism as Devilry: A Postcolonial Reading of Doctor Faustus.” Doctor
Faustus: A Critical Guide. Ed. Sarah M. Deats. London: Continuum, 2010. 111-23. Print.
Last, Suzan. “Marlowe’s Literary Double Agency: Doctor Faustus as a Subversive Comedy of
Error.” Renaissance and Reformation 24.1 (2000): 23-44. Print.

Marlowe, Christopher. The Tragical History of Doctor Faustus. The Longman Anthology of
British Literature. Vol. 1B. 4th ed. Gen. ed. David Damrosch and Kevin J. H. Dettmar.
New York: Longman, 2010. 1110-60. Print.


Here's an essay about postmodernism yayyyy~
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So It Goes:
Postmodern Worldviews in Invisible Man, Jazz, and Slaughterhouse-Five

Sometimes in life, you stop and ask yourself: Who are you? What kind of world do you live in, and what, if anything, do you see that others cannot? In your world, is there anything that lies beyond what you can see, or do you always try to see the other side of the coin? Does your society exist in deep darkness and corruption, or is your community one of honesty and high standards? Are both true? What about the people you see around you; are they all conspiring in some hidden agenda, or are they just living out their lives the best they can? What kind of world do you live in? Who are you?

Many of these questions, possibly even all of them if you want, cannot be answered with much certainty because they require you to be subjective--the answers will always be shaped by your individual opinions, biases, and interests. Subjectivity is the name of the game, and it not only makes these questions difficult and vague, but also makes our world more interesting for us as human beings. After all, we are a species that has made its fame in its ability to analyze a situation and solve problems; the invisible, indiscernible nature of our species presents another great mystery for us to solve, and whether we realize it or not, each one of us works towards an answer to many of those above questions in our daily lives. In our efforts to understand the world around us, we form our own opinions and come to our own conclusions--in essence, our perceptions of society and humanity become our paints and the world is our canvass.

Postmodern literature is a prime hunting ground to those exploring the issues of self and “the other,” because postmodern authors, along with the modernists, realize that most individuals are incapable of changing the world around them or even their own destinies. However, unlike the modernists, postmodern authors focus with great intensity on the individual during his or her travels through their reality—in other words, the often-bizarre world of postmodern literature is often more true to life than many other genres because of its emphasis on the individual in a world he or she cannot change, though this does not stop these characters from changing the ways they adapt or perceive it. Utilizing three texts, Invisible Man by Ralph Ellison, Jazz by Toni Morrison, and Slaughterhouse-Five by Kurt Vonnegut, I will demonstrate how each respective narrator’s worldview is changed by their experiences in a unique and subjective manner, how their perceptions change in the face of harsh, unforgiving reality, and how we, the reader, can interpret and see the world in which these characters live, merely by their testimony and experience.

Ralph Ellison’s time-honored classic, Invisible Man, is a prudent starting place for our discussion, as it was not only the first to be written, but also one of the first great works of postmodernism. In this story, a young, nameless black college student awakens to his invisibility during the many tribulations in his life. First, he is put through a demeaning battle royale before giving his senior speech, then he is sent away from college when he takes a school trustee to the sharecropper shacks by the river, then he looks for work in the city where he is tossed from place to place like old garbage, and just when he thinks he finds his true calling in a Communist-esque “Brotherhood,” he learns that he is merely being used by his superiors to look good to the public eye. Through these crucial two years of his life, the narrator undergoes a drastic transformation: from an optimistic, bright-eyed college student to a cynical, short-tempered recluse who curses those who refuse to see him.

Aside from the prologue and the epilogue, as well as the final few chapters, our invisible man seems to have an unquenchable optimism that remains blind to the back-stabbings he constantly endures. He does not realize right away that he was never to show Mr. Norton, the school’s proprietor, to the sharecropper shacks down the road from the university lest he be removed from the school’s roster, nor did he realize that Dr. Bledsoe’s letters of “recommendation,” given to him on his merry way to New York City, were really a condemning occupational death sentence as well as a giant middle finger—he simply doesn’t know any better, and the narrator’s tone seems oblivious as well. The son of Mr. Emerson, whom the narrator meets on his job hunt, hesitantly reveals Bledsoe’s betrayal to him; “[T]o help you, I must disillusion you,” he says before handing him the letter (Ellison 187). This was a pivotal turning point for our narrator, but it’s during his stay with the Brotherhood that he begins to understand that he’s being double-crossed by everyone in his life, particularly when the other members shun him and demean him when he handles a few speeches with emotion rather than academics. From this point, the narrator begins to make his own decisions, finishing his transformation from naïve gofer to wizened recluse. “What endurance I had in those days!” he says early on. “What enthusiasm! What a belief in the rightness of things!” (30)

In fact, long before he wises up and leaves both society and the Brotherhood to the wolves, he never even knew how to think for himself. He even plays into the inherent racism of the times, most notably during the first chapter when he presents his speech after the battle royale. Bloody and bruised, in front of a raucous, rude crowd, he tries to give his speech and “resolves to recite every word and to observe each intonation as he had practiced them,” as scholar Valerie Smith puts it (194). While not explicitly mentioned in the text, Smith reasonably asserts that the invisible man does everything in a slow and meticulous manner because of his cautious nature. Even though the crowd taunts and disgraces him, he doesn’t even mind it (or at least he doesn’t let on that he does), because he mistakenly believes that “[t]he mere possibility of a reward justifies any insults and indignations to which he may be subjected,” according to Smith (194). The truth is that no man should endure such violence and humiliation in hopes for a treat, and it’s not until his eventual rejection of the Brotherhood that he sheds this naiveté; sacrificing pride and dignity for hollow rewards is how he lived most of his early life.

Because the narrator was only whipped into shape because of the injustices he faced, we can gather that the invisible man’s world is one of corruption and deception, where you can either live inside the system and endure its torments, or live outside the system alone and unseen. Personal freedom and happiness were not among the goods he was allowed. In this society, he is an unknown figure, almost a shadow, even: “[N]ot only is he without recognizable substance and, thus, invisible; he is, as Ellison says in the epilogue, a disembodied voice without a face. He is an idea, an abstraction, a painful memory of a wasted life full of disillusionment” (Tate 265). As Claudia Tate points out in this statement, the invisible man is the result of his environment, and his environment is one where he is a faceless, nameless black man to be used by his superiors and thrown away when he outlives his usefulness; “[H]e haunts us with the truth that the fate of utter and devastating disillusionment is not reserved for him alone” (265).

In his time, our invisible man sees some terrible things (including but not limited to: riots, police brutality, and city-wide revolution), but the horrors of his reality seem to pale in comparison to those of Billy Pilgrim from Kurt Vonnegut’s acclaimed pseudo-autobiography, Slaughterhouse-Five. In this story, Billy Pilgrim recounts almost simultaneously the many life-shaping events of his life, including his service in World War II, the life and death of his wife, and his current life at home with his daughter. Billy also is kind enough to tell us about the Tralfamadorians, aliens from the planet Tralfamadore, who give him the ability to see and live in four dimensions to facilitate the simultaneity of his life’s experiences. Possibly the most important event in Billy’s life takes place during World War II, when he is captured by Axis soldiers (along with other American troops) and sent to a work camp in Dresden, where he bears witness to the infamous fire-bombing that took place there.

Both Invisible Man and Slaughterhouse-Five carry a dark view of the world in which they take place, but while the former states its case with solemn seriousness, the latter uses humor and sarcasm and various incidents of Billy telling us, “So it goes” when things go wrong. Billy attributes this phenomenon to the time-traveling Tralfamadorians:

“When a Tralfamadorian sees a corpse, all he thinks is that the dead person is in bad condition in that particular moment, but that the same person is just fine in plenty of other moments. Now, when I myself hear that somebody is dead, I simply shrug and say what the Tralfamadorians say about dead people, which is ‘So it goes.’” (Vonnegut 27)

Because Billy buys into this mindset, it’s not altogether surprising that he uses the phrase quite often, especially given the fact that he’s been through numerous traumatic experiences such as being in World War II and in an airplane crash.

Writer and scholar Scott MacFarlane elaborates on this verbal peculiarity present in Slaughterhouse-Five with the following: “At every reference to death in the novel—over one hundred times—the author reflects on the occasion by stating: ‘so it goes.’ Initially, the phrase seems to imply that this is just the way it is. Over the, [sic] course of the novel, the number of ‘so it goes’ begin to mount like a death toll” (MacFarlane 148). This would give us the impression that Billy simply does not care about any of these horrible things that happen to him, but his blasé reaction to death unusually is not only comical and dark; it’s a facade he uses when facing life, signifying deeper inner turmoil: to survive, to be able to wake up and look at himself in the mirror, he must employ comedy as a coping mechanism.

Whether Billy really met aliens, or whether he invented them out of depression, the inclusion of the Tralfamadorians is a sign that Billy refuses to come to grips with the world as it is and must invent some new way to look at life and death before his sorrow overtakes him, to reduce the pain death leaves in its wake at Billy’s feet. Scott MacFarlane explains that Billy’s life “is beset, at every major juncture, with the question of why he seems singled out to survive when so many of his fellow soldiers in Germany, his fellow optometrists after a plane crash he is in, or his wife en route to Billy’s hospital bed after the crash, all die” (148). These incidents, for the most part, are all handled with irony and humor, seemingly derailing their importance in his life, but upon closer inspection it’s apparent that Billy Pilgrim is far from detached; much like the invisible man, he begins his journey as a bright-eyed young man (“He was a valet to a preacher, expected no promotions or medals, bore no arms, and had a meek faith in a loving Jesus which most soldiers found putrid.” (Vonnegut 31)), but war and death have taken its toll on his psyche, reducing him to a schizophrenic mess who must believe in the Tralfamadorians so that he can keep his grip on reality. The result is Billy’s becoming “unstuck” in time, seeing all the fragments of his life simultaneously. MacFarlane states that the fragmentation of Billy’s mind is appropriate, as Slaughterhouse-Five “challenge[s] the way in which the reader looks at the world by first fragmenting how the world is presented” (154).

While it’s apparent to see how Billy’s depressing worldview is a result of its fragmentation, that doesn’t always necessarily mean fragmentation will always lead to eternal sorrow and sad times for all; we now turn our attention to the 2nd part of Toni Morrison’s ongoing series of the black experience in America, Jazz. Much like our previous two texts, Morrison presents us with a world going down the tubes, viewed by a narrator whose voice shapes that very world. The story follows the aftermath of a shooting carried out by a cosmetics salesman named Joe Trace; Joe had gotten involved with a girl named Dorcas, whom he shot, when his marriage with his wife, Violet, begins to grow stale. Afterwards, Violet seeks to learn more about Dorcas and her family, while Joe languishes over the murder. The couple are eventually brought back together by Dorcas’ friend, Felice, who reignites the sparks of passion in Joe and Violet.

Unlike Invisible Man and Slaughterhouse-Five, the narrator in Jazz doesn’t seem to be the main character (or any character at all), though s/he cannot help but exist inside the world they display, alongside the other characters. Author Matthew Treherne picks up on the fact that the narrator seems to know more than they should if they were a literal character, stating: “[S]he seems to speak her language. The conspiratorial ‘Sth’ and phrases like ‘quiet as it’s kept’ are suggestive of a privileged position of knowledge within her group. So she seems to speak with authority” (Treherne 201). From one chapter to the next, the narrator is our source of information (as a narrator should be), but is often stymied by his/her own subjectivity. The narrator seems like s/he knows everything and nothing at the same time because, while s/he can certainly chronicle events with ease, getting into the characters’ heads proves to be difficult and often speculatory. “I like to think of him that way,” the narrator says during the flashback incident with Golden Gray (Morrison 150). S/he tries to paint the truth of this young man, but ends up telling two versions of the story with her own opinions shaping the narrative; how could we possibly know what Golden Gray was truly like when the narrator isn’t even sure?

Of course, though, the narrator situates him/herself amidst a world where people are disconnected and hard to pin down: Violet and Joe both have very few friends, lost their parents, and have moved away from the South; Dorcas lost her parents as well, and she doesn’t get along with her aunt; Dorcas’ aunt, herself, begins to form an unsteady friendship with Violet, the woman who “went to the funeral to see the girl and to cut her dead face” (3); Golden Gray, a young man who appears in flashback, feels no human connection to a pregnant, feral black woman he ends up caring for. The characters are all so distant, not only to the reader but also to each other, but they also have the potential to grow closer to each other, as Joe and Violet do with Felice’s help. In fact, the characters’ disconnection could be the fault of the narrator, who at first feels distant from his/her subjects because, as hinted in the final pages, the narrator is the novel itself (“If I were able, I’d say it. Say make me, remake me. You are free to do it and I am free to let you because look, look. Look where your hands are. Now.” (229)).

Treherne is aware of the narrator’s identity and comments that the novel “suggest[s] that relationship[s] with others can be a form of freedom—and the narrative text can become a place where such freedom might be found” (210). Perhaps the characters only seem so distant from each other because the novel intended it that way, saying “What, I wonder, what would I be without […] aching words that set, then miss, the mark? (219). Throughout Jazz, the narrator had planted small seeds of hope amidst “I the eye of the storm” so that his/her readers would spend more time in the text, piecing together the human puzzle that is Joe, Violet, and Dorcas.

Another important point to consider with these characters is that they are not the kinds of people you meet in everyday life. People on the street would double-take at the sight of Joe or Violet, because they would be shocked by the sight of a manic-depressed black man and a bitter, unsociable black woman, as insensitive and stereotypical as it sounds, but that’s our society and we aren’t usually accustomed to people who fall outside the norm. In fact, it seems like Morrison purposefully went out of her way to ensure that her characters were stark, fresh and unique, so that they would stand out more—to remind us that people are not all the same. The same goes for the narrator, really, who is more bold and haughty than we would come to expect of a narrator. In his essay on Toni Morrison, scholar Michael Nowlin notes that “[i]f in the end the narrator of Jazz recognizes her own hubris and salutes the freedom from representation that her characters enjoy, she finds social responsibility nonetheless by reinhabiting the lonely haven of her textual domain,” (166). Because Morrison’s characters aren’t chained down by stereotypes, they not only come alive on the page in ways that benefit the reader, but also reinforce the fact that they are realistic. Not only does Morrison craft a story that’s more true to life than most nonfiction, she brings something else to the table; with Jazz, unlike the other two novels previously discussed, we have hope for our world and our society. As surely as Joe and Violet could reconcile despite an affair, a murder, and the fragmented City imposing its isolation on them, the same should be true for the rest of us.

By now, I hope you can appreciate how the narrator’s tone, along with his or her experiences, can have a tremendous effect on how their perception of society at large can be changed, and that is true for us as readers also. Each of us face each day with our own lens of ideas and beliefs to see through, and it is through those lenses that we shape our world. The invisible man saw a world of corruption and sought refuge from it; Billy Pilgrim bore witness to a world of war and death and found solace in his imagination; Jazz fought to find connection and knowledge in her world, but came to learn that the world is what you make of it, and you are free and encouraged to do so. Each narrator has come to terms with their society, and their journeys are now made famous through text for us to read and interpret. So then, as you think on these things and continue on your own journey, I must ask you again: Who are you? What kind of world do you live in?

Works Cited
Ellison, Ralph. Invisible Man. New York: Vintage International, 1995. Print.

MacFarlane, Scott. “Slaughterhouse-Five (1969): So It Goes.” Bloom’s Modern Critical
Interpretations: Kurt Vonnegut’s Slaughterhouse-Five. Ed. Harold Bloom. 147-62. Print.

Morrison, Toni. Jazz. New York: Vintage International, 2004. Print.

Nowlin, Michael. “Toni Morrison’s Jazz and the Radical Dreams of the American Writer.”
American Literature 71.1 (1999): 151-74. JSTOR. Web. 20 Oct. 2010.

Smith, Valerie. “The Meaning of Narration in Invisible Man. Ralph Ellison’s Invisible Man: A
Casebook. Ed. John F. Callahan. 189-220. Print.

Tate, Claudia. “Notes on the Invisible Women in Ralph Ellison’s Invisible Man.” Ralph Ellison’s
Invisible Man: A Casebook. Ed. John F. Callahan. 253-66. Print.

Treherne, Matthew. “Figuring In, Figuring Out: Narration and Negotiation in Toni Morrison’s
Jazz.” Narrative 11.2 (2003): 199-212. JSTOR. Web. 20 Oct. 2010.

Vonnegut, Kurt. Slaughterhouse-Five. New York: Dell, 1991. Print.


An essay on feminist literature:
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Male Influence? In My House?
It’s More Likely Than You Think!

In the world of feminist literature, there is a tendency or trend for the author to create a story in which there is a small amount of male characters. This is understandable, as throughout history, most literature was written by men about men, so this trend could either be seen as revenge for years and years of being ignored, simple reciprocation of the formula to correct those authors in their mistakes, or perhaps something as simple as a shift in storytelling styles. Regardless of which is true, in many of these novels, when men are included, the role they play is often that of a malicious and ignorant oppressor, or of an underplayed and unimportant authority figure. It’s pretty infrequent to come across a strong, benevolent male figure in feminist writings. Sure, this can be seen as a generalization, but generalizations often hold some grains of truth.

Of particular interest in this essay will be the rather tricky subject of how parental influence (particularly that of the father) plays a part in the development of literary characters in the place they call home. Traditionally, in Western culture, the father is supposed to be the pillar of provision and justice in the home with the mother being the pillar of education and nurturing instinct. The father is the one who works his back-breaking job, gets his pay, and returns home to be faced with any decision mete out any justice that need be addressed. The mother, then, is the one who keeps the house tidy and teaches the children how to be hard-working and upstanding, productive members of society. In the case becoming more common as the years go by, where both father and mother have to work, or in situations when their roles are reversed, these still-normal homes have all those roles covered, and the parents are responsible for making it happen.

In this same Western tradition, both parents must work together to ensure their child grows up to be a normal, functioning human being, just as their parents believe they are. There exists a household relations research magazine called Adolescence, with an article by Susan D. Witt, where she emphasizes how important that parental interaction is, stating, “Parental attitudes toward their children have a strong impact on their developing sense of self and self-esteem, with parental warmth and support being key factors” (Witt). In a world where things are kept simple and easy to understand, this would be how every parent raises their children, and how every home operates: two loving and caring parents who watch over and raise their child in a positive, constructive environment. More often than not, the opposite is true, and it’s more likely for the father to be an abusive figure than the mother, which then becomes a very potent literary device.

In the two novels I will look at, Bastard Out of Carolina by Dorothy Allison and Housekeeping by Marilynne Robinson, the household and its operations are not as simple as prescribed by Western tradition. On the one hand, this could be seen as a literary device: why would we be interested if a normal, functional family was involved? Often, in literature, we want to see situations that are deviant from the norm, because we want to experience different worlds seen in different ways. On the other hand (the cynical one), it could be that these dysfunctional homes are, perhaps, more normal than the “normal” household. For most of us, we could count the number of “normal” families we know with our fingers, but we could create a laundry list of households where chaos reigns and the “ideal” household seems like a delusion.

The protagonists of these novels would tell you themselves that the dream of normalcy is just that. In Bastard Out of Carolina, we follow a young girl named Ruth Anne, nicknamed “Bone,” as she grows up in an abusive home with her indecisive mother, Anney, and the tyrannical Daddy Glen. Periodically throughout the novel, Bone would receive a verbal and physical beating from Daddy Glen (even, in the climax of the novel, a sexual assault), but would never be brought to any sort of justice. He’d plead and crawl back to Anney, claim he had no idea what came over him, and everything would be all fine and dandy for everyone…except, of course, for Bone. The result is a young girl slowly being turned into a self-hating, everyone-else-loathing, and violent human being, partly because of her mother’s ignorance, but mostly due to her father’s relentless tyranny.

To Bone, it’s unsure whether Anney is the lesser or greater of two evils; on one hand, she isn’t the one who beats her on a regular basis, and she tries to be kind and gentle to her daughter, but Anney only momentarily acknowledges that the abuse happens, buys Daddy Glen’s weak and miserable excuses, and pretends nothing ever happened. It is important, however, to look at Anney’s situation: She was practically forced into marriage because of her illegitimate daughter, Bone, and to leave that union would be social suicide. In order to keep her family together, her social status relatively stable, and her daughter off the streets or in Daddy Glen’s sole custody, it could be possible that Anney must overlook the periodic beatings and abuses for the greater good of keeping the family together. Anney is a tough character to judge, as her actions could be seen as selfless sacrifice for the sake of unifying her broken family.

Daddy Glen, on the other hand (just how many hands does this essay have?), is not so hard to pass judgement upon. He is the weak link in his own family, and now he’s stuck in a rushed marriage with a woman he probably does love, a temper that flares more often than the Sun, and a rebellious child who will forever be a black mark on his social status (illegitimate children are just so darned inconvenient that way!). To top it all off, Bone seems to generally dislike him, anyway. His own insecurity and Bone’s contempt for the man are probably what set off the initial sparks in their enmity-heavy relationship; Daddy Glen has to prove that he’s a real man by putting his insubordinate daughter in her place! Looking back on the traditional family roles mentioned at the beginning, neither Anney nor Daddy Glen are properly fulfilling their roles set by our Western standards; they are a far cry from the ideal parents.

Eunjoo Woo, an author whose book details conflicted mother/daughter relationships in various works of fiction, including Bastard Out of Carolina, puts more emphasis on Anney’s influence in the story, opening one particular chapter stating, “Dorothy Allison presents her traumatic childhood and how the mother/daughter relationship influences her own development from a little girl to an independent woman” (Woo, 16). In Woo’s analysis, he explains how Dorothy Allison related her own youth into the character of Bone, placing most of the impact of what she has become on her mother’s influence. Allison relates her own experiences, at least in part, into the novel through the eyes of Bone, and Woo says that this relationship is what inspires the most change in Bone throughout the novel. I happen to disagree with him, and place that influence instead on the more oppressive figure: Daddy Glen.

Two authors, Judith Herman and Lisa Hirschman, have penned an article called “Father-Daughter Incest,” where they explore the effects of extreme paternal abuse by studying 15 volunteers who have been molested or raped by their fathers at a young age. At one point, they discuss the psychological effects that the victims of incestual rape come to terms with: the young girl learns the hard way that “[h]er initiation into the patriarchal order begins with the realization that she is not only comparatively powerless as a child, but that she will remain so as a woman” (Herman, 262). When Daddy Glen beats (and eventually, rapes) Bone, he is trying to reinforce that helplessness onto her, to show her that she will never be more powerful than him (“You think you’re so grown-up. You think you’re so big and bad, saying no to me. Let’s see how big you are, how grown!” he tells her during the rape scene). Bone defies him every chance she gets, and it’s no surprise that she works so hard to be independent and strong, because she wants to escape that feeling of helplessness Daddy Glen imposes upon her, and so she grows up to defy him the best way she knows how: she chooses a life of lesbianism. That’s some major influence.

After that lovely topic of discussion, it’s time to switch gears and take a look at Marilynne Robinson’s Housekeeping, which tells the story of two girls who grow up in a household that, not only is deprived of male influence, but also of any permanent guardian for them. Ruth and Lucille are brought to the town of Fingerbone (Ruth? Fingerbone? Don’t tell me there’s no correlation going on!) by their mother before she commits suicide, leaving them in the care of their aging grandmother. After her death, the girls are then under the care of their great-aunts, Lily and Nona, who find the task of watching over two little girls in between rounds of pinochle to be more than they can handle. When the girls’ Aunt Sylvie is in the area, Lily and Nona contact her and immediately convince her to be Ruth and Lucille’s guardian. Sylvie is a transient, and it has a strange effect on the girls’ upbringing, causing them to go their separate ways: as Christine Caver writes in her article, featured in American Literature, Lucille “desires warmth, nourishment, and acceptance by her peers, her neighbors, and her stereotypically traditional home economics teacher” (Caver, 111), while Ruth follows in Sylvie’s footsteps, becoming a more free-spirited and carefree individual who cares nothing about her “inability to conform” to society (111).

Problem is, obviously, there is a lack of any sort of male influence in this household. If the house itself weren’t hand-built by the girls’ grandfather, it’d be hard to guess whether the building would have walls or not, considering how casual and open Sylvie keeps the place. We do get some mention at the beginning of the novel about the grandfather; he worked diligently at the railroad station and he kept a tight-run ship at home. He wasn’t a tyrant like Daddy Glen, by any means, but he knew what he wanted and how he wanted it. The original intent of looking at this novel was to find the effects of patriarchal rule in the novel, but rather, instead of searching in vain for any traces of male influence in this dysfunctional family, it would be more efficient to look at what could be the result of the lack thereof.

For one thing, it’s very easy to notice that there are almost no strict guidelines to be followed for Ruth and Lucille (Aunt Sylvie seems almost bemused when they skip school), and as a consequence, there’s pretty much no need for any disciplinary action to be taken. Aunt Sylvie really lucked out on this, as Ruth and Lucille are quite well-behaved on their own (possibly due to their own father’s influence in infancy?). Also, if I did not overlook anything that occurs in the novel, there really is no steady income pouring into the house, and there seem to be very few major decisions that have to be made, though the ones that do pop up are very major. So then, that totally negates everything the traditional paternal unit of the family is supposed to do. How does this affect Ruth and Lucille in the long run, I ask.

Well, surprisingly or not, depending on your views, the girls get along just fine without any of that pesky masculine influence. Because of the lack of paternal support, they learn how to be self-sufficient, and the lack of discipline seems to force them to whip themselves into shape by themselves. Under Sylvie’s extremely lax reign, the girls forge their own identities, and learn how to survive on their own (well, maybe survive isn’t the right word, as Aunt Sylvie is still responsible for meal preparation and bill paying). This entirely female household seems to fly in the face of all that is holy and traditional; surely, this peace is doomed to end, and those uppity women will learn their place and find a good man! Because everyone eventually goes their separate ways, living what I assume to be happy lives, it’s up in the air what this novel says about the importance of male influence: is it necessary, or does it just get in the way?

One theory is that Housekeeping is a novel about women (in particular, Ruth and Aunt Sylvie) who reject the normalized, patriarchal way of life in favor of a freer, more liberating lifestyle. In her own book, entitled Gender Trouble, author Judith Butler explores the topic of femininity as standing up against the suffocating, oppressive male hegemony prominent in our society. Butler writes that the very idea of sex and gender is a falsehood, designed to keep two sides separate and unequal. The very identification of women based on their sex, she says, “is a conflation of the category of women with the ostensibly sexualized features of their bodies and, hence, a refusal to grant freedom and autonomy to women as it is purportedly enjoyed by men” (Butler, 19). In layman’s terms, gender classification is a male invention used, in many ways, to define women as something subhuman, in order to keep them restricted from gaining the same power men themselves wield. Marilynne Robinson’s novel can be read in this light, sharing the same idea (although less accusatory) that masculine influence would only serve to tear their home apart, rather than bring it together.

By looking at these two novels, you could convince yourself that male influence in the home is something to be avoided, and with good reason: the home with a father figure is governed with fear and tyranny, and the home without a father figure is a haven of freedom to (most of) its inhabitants. But then again, it’s important to keep in mind that these novels are works of feminist literature; the authors most likely aren’t trying to tell us all men are evil (Bone’s uncle sets out on a manhunt to find Daddy Glen and make him pay for his abuse, and Ruth’s grandfather was an overall good, hard-working guy), but the entire point is to encourage and empower aspiring young women to find their own place in the world. Bastard Out of Carolina and Housekeeping are novels by women for women, with the goal of inspiring other women to stand up for their independence through the hardships and journeys taken by the young protagonists; it’s just circumstance that one features a tyrannical beast of a man, and the other hardly has any men at all.

Works Cited
Abel, Elizabeth, and Emily K. Abel. "Father-Daughter Incest." The Signs Reader:
Women, Gender, & Scholarship. Chicago: University of Chicago, 1977. 257-78.
Print.

Butler, Judith. "Subjects of Sex/Gender/Desire." Gender Trouble: Feminism and the
Subversion of Identity. New York: Routledge, 1990. 1-34. Print.

Caver, Christine. "Nothing Left to Lose: Housekeeping's Strange Freedoms." American
Literature 68.1 (1996): 111-37. Print.

Witt, Susan D. "Parental influence on children's socialization to gender roles".
Adolescence. FindArticles.com. 28 Apr, 2010. Web.

Woo, Eunjoo. "Cultural conditioning and mother/daughter conflicts in the development
of identity and voice: The autobiographical fiction of Dorothy Allison, Wan-So
Pak, and Maxine Hong Kingston.” ETD Collection for University of Rhode
Island (2001). Print.


And lastly, a paper about the concept of an "eco-hero":
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The Road Less Traveled: The Three Steps of the Eco-Hero
in Ishmael, Walden, and My Year of Meats

Taking a look around us, it’s easy to see that we’re not doing a good job running the world we claim to have conquered. We place great monuments on land which we are said to own, but the earth always finds a way to topple them; we ceaselessly invent new ways to make our lives easier and more convenient, but our days just seem to get shorter and busier; we harvest the beasts of the earth, perfecting new ways to prepare and slaughter millions of farm animals, but we still find ourselves plagued by diseases originating from them. These problems, and many more, have been set loose in our society in the name of progression, but there are those who take a stand. In both real life and in fiction, the “eco-hero” emerges to stand up for the natural world, whose voice we have tried for so long to block out. By analyzing three key texts, Daniel Quinn’s Ishmael, Henry David Thoreau’s Walden, and Ruth Ozeki’s My Year of Meats, we can build a more detailed profile of the kind of figure I consider to be an eco-hero. The main character of each text personifies the three steps required for a hero to become an eco-hero: first, he must identify the cause of the natural world’s destruction and raise awareness; second, he must separate himself from that cause, in order to prepare himself to solve the problem; finally, he must take action to solve the problem.

Our first hero, the unnamed narrator of Daniel Quinn’s Ishmael, represents the first step of identifying the problem and raising awareness. In the course of the story, he meets a super-intelligent gorilla named Ishmael, who begins to teach the narrator about the two different types of people in the world: the Takers, who harvest the earth’s goods for their own benefit and live in opposition to nature (a.k.a. us), and the Leavers, who harvest the earth’s goods in a more conscientious manner, living in accord with nature (a.k.a. cultural groups like the Native Americans). The narrator, through Ishmael’s teachings, realizes that the lifestyle adopted by modernized countries like the U.S. cannot possibly last, and that everyone must be taught what he has been taught. “The premise of the Taker story is the world belongs to man,” the narrator states near to the end of his journey. He continues by saying, “The premise of the Leaver story is man belongs to the world” (239). By the end of his learning experience, the narrator has come to learn that, in order to prevent the human race from destroying itself, mankind must cease its relentless assault on the natural world.

This narrator evolves into an eco-hero role through his sessions with Ishmael, and spends the majority of the novel learning what the chief problem in the world is—thus why he exemplifies the first step of the Path of the Eco-Hero most of all. Of course, we are left with the option to assume that he follows up on his knowledge and takes action to solve the problem, but my choice to represent him as the first step was deliberately due to the bulk of time dedicated to it. Unfortunately, our narrator hits a brick wall: it’s easy enough to get a message across, but getting others to follow your example is not a simple task (“[What] the people of this culture want is to have as much wealth and power in the Taker prison as they can get. They don’t give a damn that it’s a prison and […] that it’s destroying the world.”) (253). This particular eco-hero has come across a dilemma, but there are others who know how to proceed once the problem has been identified. In particular, we now switch gears to Walden, the almost-legendary natural literary work of Henry David Thoreau. Because it is a work of nonfiction, it only makes sense to state that our second eco-hero is Thoreau himself. The plotline behind Walden is fairly simple: Thoreau,

having grown frustrated with the state of society and its stresses, ventures out of the city to the titular pond in order to lead a simpler life. He builds himself a small cabin, observes the local wildlife as well as the local human visitors, reads, and writes on philosophical notions that occur to him during his stay. This outing is described to us in detail, from season to season, for a period of a little over two years, until he finally bids farewell to his second home and goes back to normal life. All the while, Thoreau impresses upon us the importance of reawakening from the stupor of daily routine and live life more fully than the day before. From this synopsis, it’s not obvious how Thoreau counts as an eco-hero; so he stayed in the woods for a while and wrote some philosophical stuff about it, so what? Well, let’s just say he discusses more than just the colors of the leaves.

Unlike the narrator of Ishmael, Thoreau discovers the problem with his society almost immediately: “The mass of men lead lives of quiet desperation,” he clearly states early on, and continues by saying, “A stereotyped but unconscious despair is concealed even under what are called the games and amusements of mankind. There is no play in them, for this comes after work” (8). People have no life and no will of their own; everything comes down to work and routine and drudgery with some amusement as an afterthought if there’s time. The majority of Walden, however, displays Thoreau’s idea of how to best remove ourselves from the problems that plague society society—the second step the eco-hero must take. “I went to the woods because I wished to live deliberately,” Thoreau tells us early on, “to front only the essential facts of life, and see if I could not learn what it had to teach” (90). With this passage, along with the text’s continual urging to awaken or reawaken ourselves, Thoreau is prescribing that, in order to solve the problems that persist through his society (and even ours), we must leave all of our needless complications behind us and live life to its fullest with only the essentials of life, hopefully shaking many people out of the trance-like state they find themselves entering in their daily lives. While Thoreau pushes and urges us strongly to follow (though not mimic) his example, the change he brings about is more passive than active. This is why he represents the second step of the eco-hero’s journey.

To complete our journey, the third step the eco-hero must travel is exemplified by Jane Takagi-Little, protagonist of Ruth Ozeki’s My Year of Meats. Jane works as a journalist when she is commissioned by a Japanese production company creating a TV show called “My American Wife!” in which a special sponsor-approved, beef-based, home-cooked meal is the centerpiece amidst an “everyday” American family. Beef-Ex puts on a good show of being a clean, modern meat production company, but under the surface, manipulation and cover-ups are the name of the game, and Jane learns that DES, a chemical which has been known to cause high estrogen in men and infertility in women, may exist in large quantities in the facilities (and proof even shows up later on). Little by little, Jane opposes the production company in order to not only create a more accurate portrait of America for the Japanese audience, but also to expose the seedy underbelly of the meat production industry.

Jane personifies the third step of the eco-hero’s journey because she not only discovers what is wrong with her society in regards to the natural world and separates herself from it, she spends much of the novel actively fighting to solve those problems. When taken to an actual slaughterhouse in the desert southwest, Jane expresses a lot of distress regarding the chemicals fed to the animals. Not only is Jane fighting for human safety, but she also exposes the hideous treatment and living conditions that the animals must endure: “Stepping into the slaughterhouse was like walking through an invisible wall into hell. Sight, sound, smell—every sense I thought I owned, that was mine, the slaughterhouse stripped from me, overpowered and assaulted” (281). Blood all over the floor, feces everywhere, cows and chickens force-fed growth hormones and sanitation chemicals—it was not a pretty sight for Jane and her camera crew to see. And all of this horror was captured for the world to see. Whether or not she could change the world, you could count on the fact that she was going to try, and thus Jane rises from being just a humble reporter living in a cramped apartment to a heroic figure in the reader’s eyes.

For our heroes—the nameless narrator guided by Ishmael, Thoreau, Jane and her entourage—the path leading to what is right and what will keep humanity going is a long and arduous one. Even knowing this, all of them have risen to accept the challenge, and we as readers are encouraged, in all three texts, to do the same. Whether we’re saving the world from ourselves or embarking on a journey of self-discovery, we have an example to follow and learn from. Optimism is a trait shared by all three authors, and it’s with this optimism that they envision a better world for future generations. The implication is that, while we may have come this far and some things cannot be changed so easily, we still have time to correct our mistakes and set ourselves on the right path; to take our first steps to become an eco-hero ourselves. The most important thing we learn from these authors is that, no matter what, the first step must be taken while we still have time. “There is more day to dawn,” says Thoreau. “The sun is but a morning star” (333).


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PostPosted: Thu Apr 12, 2012 10:30 pm 
 

A huge chunk of what I write is poetry, but another good portion is horror/psychological thriller type stuff influenced by HP Lovecraft and other 60's-and-earlier literature. I can't stand anything after Stephen King. I wish to one day write an epic poem (somewhere upwards of 200 pages, preferably). Most of my themes in poetry revolve either around satan, depression, suicide, or love of some sort.

Here's a recent piece:

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On the bluest seas she rode,
Never to be seen again,
And on the golden boats,
The water-dragons that carry
My people so far,
Did our love fall
Or was it the world
That tore us apart?

I walked the shorelines,
The beaches of my land,
The jewels of all my riches,
Seemed worthless as the sand
That lay beneath my feet.
Not all the waves of the sea,
Could bring my goddess back home

Her face etched into my mind,
And in the light of the moon,
In my mind, so divine,
Her body moves with mine
In the flame of love we shone,
Her velvet flesh reflecting
In the radiance of the fire

Before dawn, the first day,
Her absence resonating,
Through the woods, and in the sky,
The jays and crows did not fly,
The priestess of the woods,
Vanished before our eyes,
The colours of our sorrow shed
Upon our cheeks,
Feeding her flowers,
My pain eternal,

In the circle of trees,
Her once-warm bed,
Lay the dead arms of Ents,
And the Entwives that no longer are,
The Fauna weeped and Flora wept
T'where did the oceans have her swept?
How long must I wait,
On high land or low,
For my Beloved to row home?

My steed
Carried on the wings of night,
Flew me from my own fright,
And back, to the place I belonged,
The bays of my land,
To watch the ships pass,
To seek the soft touch,
Of my lover's hand.

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I mostly write poetry, but I've been working on a novel that is absolutely terrible. It's high fantasy. Moving on from that, here are some pieces I wrote;

Yes, I realize the Mastodon reference
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alone, I saw you standing on a cliff
waves crash and the clouds wail and weep
the fire you carried close to your heart I saw drift away

walking, I saw you stare vacantly into the black sea below
the briny dead lift withered fingers to your face
caressing and soft
beckoning you with tales of forgotten cities and ancient treasures

running, I saw you falling like a shining star in the darkened sky
your wings frail and crumbling
the lifeless living watching with anticipating eyes
the cold ocean reaches up and takes your soul, but leaves your body behind

fallen, I saw you drifting floating on waters so calm
the decayed ivory bodies dance with joy as another angel falls
even in death your eyes show more life than the desolate worms that sink once more to depths

if I could only find where your soul went…
ascending a stairway through a crack in the sky
if I could only find the gateway to the heavens….
hidden behind a curtain of breaking whitecaps

…I look to a cliff


And I wrote this after reading Lord of the Flies. There's actually a tiny Agalloch reference.
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the works of man are a failure
our great citadels built with foundations of skin and bone
the heart of man is surely darkness!
with heavy clouds of ash we hide our bloodless bodies

haunted for the entirety of our lives
is there ever a moment of purity?
like the barbed arrows in my bloated side
we can never rid ourselves of the venom biting in our veins

for tonight, tonight there is only blood and fire
the earth ignited from shore to shattered shore
demons descend into anticipating arms
"there is nothing we will not do!"
a celebration of the perversion in man

frenzied, raving, babbling, they rejoice in bloodshed
do they have no intention of being saved?
ripping and tearing through all flesh in sight
reveling in pools of vomited gore

the fattened pigs shout in the night
"now dance! see how we can laugh at the chaos around us"
the echoing words can't be cut short
"there is only blood! blood and fire!"

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I've been working on a dark fantasy novel for a while, as well as a science fiction one. This year I'm going to try to participate in the nanowrimo (national novel writing month). Sounds like fun to me. http://www.nanowrimo.org/
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