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donnydoom
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Sat Sep 06, 2008 10:33 pm
Posts: 7
Location: United States of America
PostPosted: Sun Jan 19, 2014 4:44 am 
 

DarkWhatever wrote:
Godspeed to godlessness
Newly deceased
A shade to be
Your pain in life
You'll carry eternally

Bones smashed to dust
Cyclic resurrection
Sick miracle

Reflection of mankind
Collective of the damned
Stygian slums
The dwellings of earth's scum

Masturbatory
Death wishers

Every tree a hangmans plea

Marauders of the void
Cavalry of corpse gray horses
Flesh bound flags raised high
We've come to feed

A race of traitors and swine
Baptized in shit, liars and charlatans


Damn those lyrics are wicked!

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HellFire Dragon
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Joined: Fri Sep 13, 2013 8:44 am
Posts: 1
Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Fri Jan 24, 2014 5:25 am 
 

Title: Mutilation of The Predator (brutal death metal lyrics)

Striking the weak with ruthless forces
Bludgeoned, axed to pieces in seconds
Discarding the torn an mutilated corpses
Murder, cold blood, death beckons

Thirst for blood and chaos
Security collapsed, savage events begin to unfold
You call this a loss?
I call it gain, less humans destroying the world

Sucking the life and juices of the earth
Feeding your unrelenting need for greed
Warm flesh is all you’re worth
Castrate and wipe away your reproductive seed
Returning what you've taken by force

Predator - only mortal
Predator - worthless parasites
Predator - unjust rights
Predator - restless nights
Predator - your time has come
Predator - the killing is done

Your time is no more, all creatures tear you to shreds
Screaming bloody gore, humanity is dead
Consumed by the predator
Consumed by the predator....
Your time is done...
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psykfall
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Joined: Fri Sep 13, 2013 9:47 am
Posts: 12
Location: Sweden
PostPosted: Fri Jan 24, 2014 7:44 pm 
 

I would love some feedback on my lyrics. I recently began doing them for my one man project. I can only hint at that they are not satanic neither demonic, to me atleast, but you can of course percieve them as you wish.

Invocation of a Forgotten God

Self-extinction
is reached
through him
the one who cover the fields and mountains
with snow
thoughts of unspeakable horror
aghast (we are) by it's beauty
carry me to the firmament

Whispers

embraced by red
the walls are whispering
a spirit appears
silence

The Manifestation of a Spirit

the eyes of spirits are manifested in the trees
as we wreak havoc they watch
forever

The Hangman

preparing his imminent self-destruction
the hangman hand touches the skin
alone
the hangman
hanging
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ClaymanOnFire
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Joined: Sat Mar 12, 2011 8:13 pm
Posts: 465
Location: Nice try, Big Brother
PostPosted: Wed Feb 05, 2014 2:38 am 
 

Here's something I've been sitting on for a while. It'll be for a post-rock/prog metal/minimalist thing I'm working on, although I would like it to work as stand-alone poetry.

Rain falls on the backs of men
Men who don't look up
Men who hack swathes through the silver beads
Beads who murmur,
"My child,
My son,
My love…"

The ocean slakes curiosity
The earth creaks and crows its wisdom
But the skies are most expressive
And paint their heart across the heavens

So the men say to themselves,
"We are not children"
And barricade the sea
"We are men"
And suffocate the land
"Ours is the stronger sex"
And fashion a hood
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BURlAL
Metal newbie

Joined: Fri May 21, 2010 11:32 pm
Posts: 216
PostPosted: Thu Feb 13, 2014 4:10 am 
 

I just finished this one....opinions?

Flesh Tomb

Unable to see the light, Eyeless and blind
Searching Within or without
Praying Begging
Screaming out to No-one
Asking for nothing
As the children cry unto their mothers
To deflesh their spirits
Answers without questions
Riddles of the spiritual parasite
Seas of sadness in their eyes
Rituals unto their blind god
Possessor of heaven and earth
To bleed the sins from mortal shells
Exodus of this earthly hell
Searching for the blasphemous light
Cyclical purgatory of infinite madness
Forever trapping planetary prison
Descending into a religious slumber

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puggy
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Joined: Sun Dec 29, 2013 7:08 am
Posts: 74
Location: United States
PostPosted: Mon Feb 17, 2014 8:10 am 
 

"Infantile Massacre"

The sins of their fathers
Condemned them at birth
Passed onto their young
When the deed was unearthed

They must die

Inheritors of a tarnished birthright
Beneficiaries to a throne resting upon
A mountain of bodies dismembered
They must suffer

Cursed by the sins of their fathers
They must die

Upon the infants our wrath was unleashed
The hammer fell upon their heads
Their skulls were forged into nil
Our vengeance has come to fruition

Cursed by the sins of their fathers
They must die
They must suffer
They must die

The survivors are left to hang from the hook
The serrated steel clasp of death
Torn them apart, ripped to shreds
Reduced to pulp and remains

Cursed by the sins of their fathers
They must die
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simonitro
Metal newbie

Joined: Thu Apr 08, 2004 3:41 pm
Posts: 213
Location: Lebanon
PostPosted: Mon Feb 17, 2014 2:46 pm 
 

Dalton The Romantic Zombie (Now, for something fucked up!)

He wants to eat her alive
Horror is in her eyes
And he falls on top of her
Rubbing hand on her hair
His other hand on her hips
She looks inside dead sockets
So, as two will lock their lips
As they enjoy the night
Alright!

(Chorus)

It's disgusting unethical love
Between the living and the dead
Passion between the two
It was love at first bite
Caressing in the night
IN THEIR NIGHT
Hell yeah alright!


She felt pleasure
Something to treasure
First it was fear
But love is so clear
His flesh felt rotten
No guilt down within
The undead has a heart
As the romance would start
Again

Even other undead raise their brows
Feeling unclean from him and her
Between his legs something grown
And the soulmates did not care

(Chorus)

(Guitar Solo 1)

And the heat comes at night
The seduction of the undead
Such an ugly, repulsive sight
He's more than a man she said
The intensity ripped his flesh
Something no one to wish
And she loves every moment
His knees got to be bent
NOW!!!

(Guitar Solo 2)

His heart did beat
On this night
It feels the heat
Oh hell! Alright!!!

(Chorus)

So smokingly romantic
Beauty and the beast

-----------------

Death Doesn't Care



You’re coming along with me
Whether you like it or not
For I shall set you free
Your life soon to rot

There’s no escape, my friend
I shall come whenever I want
Take you away by the hand
Feeble victim for me to hunt

(Chorus)

Are you too beautiful to die
You shall come with me
Are you too young to die
You shall come with me
No remorse, no second chance
Against your life shall I advance....


I may be the grim reaper
Yet a smile on my face
For you are now my keeper
Your heart shall I embrace

(Chorus change)

Are you too smart to die
You shall come with me
Are you too useful to die
You shall come with me
No remorse, no second chance
Against your life shall I advance....


I can see it all
In my list of mine
Everyone shall fall
I'M YOUR ENDING SIGN

YOU ARE ALL MINE!!!
HAHAHAHAHA!!!

(Guitar Solo)

You see me at war
You see me in your hands
I end your own lore
I’ll take you with me TO THE PROMISED LAND!!!

(Chorus change)

Are you too happy to die
You shall come with me
Are you too sad to die
YOU ALL SHALL COME WITH ME
NO REMORSE, NO SECOND CHANCE
ON YOUR SOULS I SHALL DANCE


ALRIGHT!!!

(Outro Guitar Solo)
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MetalMerchant
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Sun Oct 23, 2011 12:40 am
Posts: 27
PostPosted: Wed Feb 26, 2014 10:15 pm 
 

I am death waking up in a coffin.

I'm back with a couple more things for y'all to read. Enjoy!

This is Song of Sol:
Sky clad, trimmed in blood,
I sing my song of Sol
Before this mound of
Vessels undone;
I shout this praise
In the sweat of the sun,
I shout this praise
Of death by flames

Condensing of the
Not-too-quickly-biodegradable;
Acceleration into ashes and dust
Is not done as often as it must
And so the smoke wafts black
And the herds swell
And wait to be quelled

Praises sung become praises screamed;
Slight forms dissipate
Within the smokescreen
And the atomized fall

We homo superior,
Who are gas-masked against
This natural culmination,
Take a great pleasure in
And nigh treat this charity act
For the species
As recreation,
Done in as communal a manner
As one pleases

Their memory lingers in the air
Like the stench of the billions
Of scorched skins and burnt hairs


This is not yet titled.

Pleasure is pain -
The inverse the same;
Leather lightning cracks
And urine falls like rain

Dehumanized in bondage,
Your cowhide frame caressed;
Thou shalt be whipped bloodless
And forced into cardiac arrest and
Your zipper-sealed cunt,
In time, will be sewn shut;
You have no need for eyes
For your ordeal is blinding white

Thou art mine slave
And thus thou shalt serve;
By beating and by blade I
Blanket blood on every curve;
Muscle is exposed by teeth
And I mourn every severed nerve

Painless and numb,
Deaf, blind and dumb-
Soon to be gutted and fucked;
Natural and man-made orifices
Are fondled, teased, and stuffed

The question persists,
Should I make you my corpse
Or keep you like this?
My dungeon-side demeanor
Remains merciful, yet
The not-human in me begs
To exceed your body's limits

In post-anatomization,
I catalogue every
precious part of you;
I thank you for the memories
Of this time spent between us two


And this is something of a sequel to the above, also not really titled.

Clothed in flora and fungus
And with my own seed;
I return after a seasons hiatus
To pacify my natural needs

The state you are in
Excites my other side;
The pretty face I opened wide
And watched scream and bleed
Is replaced by bone sun-bleached white

Fragile flesh is scarce
On this thing to be fucked;
Where was once your tight sex
Now only remains space
That denies me the supple
Cunt I'd once flayed

The shadows inside your orbits
Remind me of times gone by;
Nostalgic murder by rape
In which I'd relished the moment
The light and life left your eyes

Murdered mistress, I bid you adieu
And give thanks for all that
Blossomed between us two;
I deny you a grave marker
And even a simple burial mound
For this lair of new life
Is the best of funeral shrouds

As food for the worms,
I allow your descent
So that you can ferment
The trees you now serve;
You remain with me
As the breath I breathe

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MetalMerchant
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Sun Oct 23, 2011 12:40 am
Posts: 27
PostPosted: Wed Feb 26, 2014 10:18 pm 
 

MetalMerchant wrote:
I am death waking up in a coffin.

I'm back with a couple more things for y'all to read. Enjoy!

This is Song of Sol:
Sky clad, trimmed in blood,
I sing my song of Sol
Before this mound of
Vessels undone;
I shout this praise
In the sweat of the sun,
I shout this praise
Of death by flames

Condensing of the
Not-too-quickly-biodegradable;
Acceleration into ashes and dust
Is not done as often as it must
And so the smoke wafts black
And the herds swell
And wait to be quelled

Praises sung become praises screamed;
Slight forms dissipate
Within the smokescreen
And the atomized fall

We homo superior,
Who are gas-masked against
This natural culmination,
Take a great pleasure in
And nigh treat this charity act
For the species
As recreation,
Done in as communal a manner
As one pleases

Their memory lingers in the air
Like the stench of the billions
Of scorched skins and burnt hairs


This is not yet titled.

Pleasure is pain -
The inverse the same;
Leather lightning cracks
And urine falls like rain

Dehumanized in bondage,
Your cowhide frame caressed;
Thou shalt be whipped bloodless
And forced into cardiac arrest and
Your zipper-sealed cunt,
In time, will be sewn shut;
You have no need for eyes
For your ordeal is blinding white

Thou art mine slave
And thus thou shalt serve;
By beating and by blade I
Blanket blood on every curve;
Muscle is exposed by teeth
And I mourn every severed nerve

Painless and numb,
Deaf, blind and dumb-
Soon to be gutted and fucked;
Natural and man-made orifices
Are fondled, teased, and stuffed

The question persists,
Should I make you my corpse
Or keep you like this?
My dungeon-side demeanor
Remains merciful, yet
The not-human in me begs
To exceed your body's limits

In post-anatomization,
I catalogue every
precious part of you;
I thank you for the memories
Of this time spent between us two


And this is something of a sequel to the above, also not really titled.

Clothed in flora and fungus
And with my own seed;
I return after a seasons hiatus
To pacify my natural needs

The state you are in
Excites my other side;
The pretty face I opened wide
And watched scream and bleed
Is replaced by bone sun-bleached white

Fragile flesh is scarce
On this thing to be fucked;
Where was once your tight sex
Now only remains space
That denies me the supple
Cunt I'd once flayed

The shadows inside your orbits
Remind me of times gone by;
Nostalgic murder by rape
In which I'd relished the moment
The light and life left your eyes

Murdered mistress, I bid you adieu
And give thanks for all that
Blossomed between us two;
I deny you a grave marker
And even a simple burial mound
For this lair of new life
Is the best of funeral shrouds

As food for the worms,
I allow your descent
So that you can ferment
The trees you now serve;
You remain with me
As the breath I breathe



Let me know what y'all think. The marine corps has out me on massive downtime lately and I'll be getting medically discharged before too long, so you can expect a good deal from me in the future, like you already have.

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Xlxlx
Metal freak

Joined: Sat Dec 24, 2011 2:16 pm
Posts: 5622
Location: Argentina
PostPosted: Fri Feb 28, 2014 1:02 am 
 

Merchant, hey! So glad to see you here again :-D I'll refrain from talking about your lyrics, because we all know that they're fucking awesome and it'd be redundant of me to say it again. Just wanted to welcome you back!
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MetalMerchant
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Joined: Sun Oct 23, 2011 12:40 am
Posts: 27
PostPosted: Fri Feb 28, 2014 7:28 am 
 

I step away from music every now and then to keep it fresh for me. I haven't had a chance to write too many lyrics, but I do have some ideas swimming around.

Thank you for the warm welcome, bud!

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BURlAL
Metal newbie

Joined: Fri May 21, 2010 11:32 pm
Posts: 216
PostPosted: Tue Mar 11, 2014 2:50 pm 
 

Inverted Oppression

Lost
I wander in a forest of doubt
Abandoned
with a mass of condescending voices
Forgotten
in the loneliness of my mind

Dragged through a river of never ending spite
Left alone to choke on the gloom and madness
An eternal trance of ritualistic self-loathing
This pitiful hymn a testament of all my failures

Worthless
like a writhing spineless worm
Bleeding
as a dull blade rapes my flesh
Empty
these dead hollow eyes

Suffocating on the bitterness of my beliefs
Cry out to stop the impending collapse of sanity
Tormented by a cacophony of everlasting memories
Drowning in a unrelenting deluge of hopelessness

Wretched
a groveling wreck of manic fears
Demented
endless is the void of the mind
Sickness
devoid of all passion and desire

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gloriawhughes
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Thu Mar 13, 2014 5:02 am
Posts: 1
PostPosted: Thu Mar 13, 2014 5:12 am 
 

gomorro wrote:
Some old stuff:

All By Our Hands

I open my eyes
And find myself surounded by disgrace
I can’t understand
How this could be reality

Earth is getting dry
Races are dying, as the land
If this make you feel cringe
Just turn your head to other side

There is nobody I can trust
There is nobody I can relay
This world is so unfair
But escape is not the other side

Blood against blood
Child against child
This rotten war
Is killing the tomorrow we may have

Values are now lost
And the true now have a price
Fear is the law
For the ones who can’t talk, stand or fight

There is nobody I can trust
There is nobody I can relay
Power buy people’s mind
And lady justice is so damn blind

Maybe this is the hell of other place
But something is sure
The end of this world is close
And all thanks to our hands


Sounds good.Keep it Up.

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donnydoom
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Sat Sep 06, 2008 10:33 pm
Posts: 7
Location: United States of America
PostPosted: Sun Mar 16, 2014 1:25 pm 
 

Ocean Goddess

We prepared the ritual grounds to give
thanks to our Ocean Goddess
before we stepped on her black shore

(Chorus)
Ocean,
Ocean Goddess
Ocean,
Ocean Goddess

On our journey through the ocean
of eternal liquid as we set sail the
ship's anchor was raised and the
Ocean Goddess's breath
which propelled us onward we hail

On our voyage we lost so many
shipmates during the great battle at sea

At the end the Ocean Goddess
rewarded us with the feast of a
giant winged sea beast

(Chorus)
Ocean,
Ocean Goddess
Ocean,
Ocean Goddess


☢ ฿γ ⚔ Ðöηηγ Ðoöღ ⚔ 2014 ☢

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Xlxlx
Metal freak

Joined: Sat Dec 24, 2011 2:16 pm
Posts: 5622
Location: Argentina
PostPosted: Thu Apr 03, 2014 9:09 pm 
 

Depths of Arcadia

Hear the breeze call out your name
Through the valleys it beckons you
As the trees mourn your absence
And the People carry on

Lost you were, in a land of iron men
Your blood a secret, holy and true
But time is a healer, fair and just
And reunited you are, with your heritage
We, Kings of the Woods, welcome you back

With flaming blossoms
And in a chariot of winds
You are taken back to your land of birth

Step now into the Depths of Arcadia
Sacred evermore
Join the ranks of the Fae and Sidhe
Silken hands will tend to your wounds
And the skies themselves will be yours to take

A feast for fools and paragons alike
To celebrate the return of the prince
Ambrosia and nectar be served for him
And a Wild Hunt arranged, to initiate him


So, I've finally managed to get away from the macabre and decided to try my hand at some power metal lyrics. I'm thinking that this kind of stuff would do well with a musical context along the lines of, say, Blind Guardian's Curse My Name. You know; folky and uplifting, and progressively more layered and bombastic. Of course, this isn't finished yet, as the "Step now into the Depths of Arcadia" part is the chorus and I haven't gotten to abuse it yet :-D However, it's a start, and it certainly feels fresh to me.

So yeah, what do you guys think?
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IanThrash
Metalhead

Joined: Mon Dec 26, 2011 10:56 pm
Posts: 918
Location: Argentina
PostPosted: Fri Apr 04, 2014 12:29 am 
 

Hey X.x.x those are some great lyrics, I loved the whole imagery. Congrats!



Originally written in spanish!


Mareas

lavando la tierra de las manos
limpiando cuerpos de dolor
fundiendo muertos en el ocaso
uniéndolos al mar
alimentándose de su carne
que eternamente viva estará

en cada gota derramada
en cada sorbo, por mas lejano que sea
en el agua beberán mi sangre
aunque mis venas no se vean

despierta de su sueño a gigantes
erosionando las rocas de su guarida
robandoles de un tajo seco
por la garganta vaciandolos de vida

la misma agua que muerde como canibal
mis huesos hasta la médula
con colmillos afilados
de viejas y rabiosas sirenas

siempre recuerdan en su canto
que fui rey un día, de un castillo de arena
la luna es mi enemiga
y su ejercito fue la marea

ahora soy un huérfano del océano
sin nombre ni edad
atado por siempre a los mares
en las aguas de mi tiempo
condenado a vagar


Tides (roughly translated)

Washing away the dust from the hands
cleaning the bodies out of pain
merging the dead with the sunset
joining them to the sea
feeding on their flesh
that eternally will live


In every drop spilled
In every sip, however distant it is
In the water you shall drink my blood
even though my veins are not shown


Wakes up giants from their slumber
Eroding the rocks of their lair
Stealing with a quick slash
by the throat emptying them of life

The same water that bites as a cannibal
my bones to the marrow
with the sharp fangs
of old and rabid mermaids


They always remeber in their chant
that king I once was, of a castle made of sand
the moon was my enemy
her army were the tides

now I'm and orfan of the oceans
without name, without age
bounded forever to the sea
in the waters of my time
doomed to sail
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Fenriz: I am up for cloning, but with less tinnitus and more chest hair, please.

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IanThrash
Metalhead

Joined: Mon Dec 26, 2011 10:56 pm
Posts: 918
Location: Argentina
PostPosted: Fri Apr 04, 2014 12:51 am 
 

Here's another one! I'll try to translate this, but its getting ratter difficult due to my lack of knowledge in english.


Sol de Neon (Neon Sun)

en la ciudad hay un rumor
de piernas vírgenes
bajo la luz de neón
alimañas la carcomieron
de la entrepierna al corazon
extraños pagan por desnudarla
y sentirse vivos con su calor


una tumba aun sin ocupar
no parpadea y casi
que quiere dejar de respirar
vaciada por los labios
y por la boca tambien
como presa el neon la ilumina
pero solo los cazadores la ven


en la ciudad hay un rumor
de piernas vírgenes
bajo la luz de neón
como el sol de la noche
amanece en las esquinas
con sabor a niñez
disfrazada en portaligas

labios de princesa
de la sonrisa en su garganta
la sangre fluye y no cesa
en la comisura de sus labios
hay unas frase que se seca
"un hombre de verdad
jamas pagaria por el amor
de una tierna muñeca"
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Fenriz: I am up for cloning, but with less tinnitus and more chest hair, please.

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Nochielo
Metalhead

Joined: Mon Sep 29, 2008 8:20 am
Posts: 1720
Location: Puerto Rico
PostPosted: Thu Apr 10, 2014 6:08 pm 
 

Esas están chéveres! I'm not sure if we are talking necrophilia or prostitution (or both). I can get really dense sometimes.

As for these, I don't have a title for and were not given much thought to. So have a go:

Movement; the sign of life deplete
We wait so thus forgotten
As per ordinance of time
Comes morning

But the heart knows not the dawn
Revels in the rueful night
Now the minute speck of light
Subsiding

Not the strength a soul relinquished
Comes before the starlit skies
And plead thee for thy gentle kiss
A notion thus the soul belies

How beauteous the yesterdays
'Twas but to frolic forever
These quandaries were never
But dust beneath the rays

'Tis loath for gentle morning
To abhor to lose the fear
Advent void not sojourning
But to settle what it sees

Where there is pain a seething scar
A gift of things that shall not pass
A retroactive warning
A reprise of our mistakes

We are the desert's ponds
Before the thirsty throats
We'll reach for bright and near
A wish so mighty true
Can naught but dissapear

Stillness; crest of permanence
Sad myth of hanker birthed
It is us, the fever dream
Dissolving
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Necroticism174
Kite String Popper

Joined: Mon Mar 30, 2009 6:46 pm
Posts: 4998
Location: Canada
PostPosted: Thu Apr 10, 2014 10:46 pm 
 

Let Them Die:

The end came suddenly
Like a plague or a natural disaster
Only it wasn't
The sunlight died in the grey ash of smokey skies
We buried our dead in the dirt
Along broken roads
Planes showered desolate streets and homes long abandoned
We walked for miles and miles
In the dark of the neverending night
"Help me!" she cried
But no one heard her
Or they refused to
Because she was found in thirty pieces
In the back of a truck
That was buried in rubble
With the decapitated driver in the front
Everything was on fire
Or would be
These were truly the final days
The car radio blared static
So I turned it off
But the static was in my head
I lit a cigarette and begged her not to do it
But it was too late
She'd already pulled the trigger
And I was bleeding to death
A glimmer of sunlight broke through the taint of the front window
And then disappeared
She said she'd shoot a second time
But I didn't believe her
"Why?" she shrieked
I told her that she was out of bullets
And she kissed me
We were the last
And now there would be none
"I'm sick" she said
The poison was working
"Let it die. It's just a dog." my father had told me, when I'd been a child
The dog had collapsed on our front porch, as he smoked his cheap cigar
I'd watched it die
And it'd seen me staring at it, doing nothing
It had cursed me at that moment, I'm sure of it
Me and the whole damn race
But I suppose that's just it, though
The big guy up there must have said, "Let them die"
Because me and you
Well, we're just dogs
That's all we are
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Mordant
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Location: Sweden
PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 4:02 am 
 

Late 420 addition, have been smoking and writing a lot lately, this is the newest one.

Sativia Saivo
Rotting leaves will become my bed
Journey the universe and my head
Frozen breath in frost bitten air
With fervor proclaim the somber prayer

The air scented with herbal smoke
Clad in tattered animal skin cloak
Donned with the withered, blackened bones
Draped in clattering, polished stones

In the shadows of mountains so tall
I follow the woods ancient call
Archaic invocations of primal essence
Shrouded in the frozen luminescence

Remembrance under the northern lights
Observe the path of the last rites
Shamanistic ritual of exploration
To achieve my spiritual salvation

Bang the drums, inhale the smoke
Primitive murmurs the spirits woke
Spectral shapes in celestial dance
Mystic echos of the cosmic trance

Stand alone in the woodland cathedral
Primitive sermon on the stone steeple
Delve into the true human beyond
Wise and whispering voices spawned

Seeker of the ancient cosmic riddles
Across the stars I see the mystic symbols
Dance mindlessly around the raging fire
Cryptic chants from the cavernous choir

See the smoke travel the skies
Hark back to the ancient times
Future memories from the distant past
Under the star speckled sky so vast

Crowned by the horned creatures
Anointed by ghostly preachers
Immerse my mind in the fog
Age as bodies laid in the bog

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Syntek
Metalhead

Joined: Mon Sep 13, 2010 1:14 pm
Posts: 620
Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Wed Apr 23, 2014 3:51 pm 
 

Experienced a pretty great loss recently, and wrote this to keep me company, I guess:

Footprints from where I ran away,
Gave sake enough to feel alone.
I wandered lorn acres for days,
Unable to find my way back home.

Fleeting dreams light my path,
That long for the warmth of skin again.
Though my bones may split, my spirit break,
I endure - the circle remains.

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Katzen Sind Krieg
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Joined: Sun May 11, 2014 12:18 pm
Posts: 8
Location: United States
PostPosted: Sun May 11, 2014 12:37 pm 
 

Screwing around in school the other day, not particularly in the mood to do actual work, and wrote this.

Standing at the ruins, I fell the connection
To the dissolved skies of another time
Infinite collapse on the event horizon
Decaying, retreat to grey

The sky is descending, the curtain falls
As we erode into our sempiternal origins
But as we go, we leave our trace
For the future to unravel

These buildings are monochrome. A subtle reminder of man's mortality.
These buildings are dead. To the winds of time we begrudgingly submit.
These buildings are crumbling. We are absorbed in thought, finite and penultimate.

At the ruins, I cross the gate
Bearing a portal to an elder era's dimensiom
Bereft of the burdens placed on the Earth
Transcendent, in a state of dissonant peace

This is my home, in the distance
So far away from the modern life
The blood-carrier skies I left behind
In favor of solitude

These buildings are monochrome. A subtle reminder of man's mortality.
These buildings are dead. To the winds of time we begrudgingly submit.
These buildings are crumbling. We are absorbed in thought, finite and penultimate.

The remnants of the preceding age are my home
In the tranquil monochrome, I find release
Death is ethereal, craft of legends
And with it I am one.

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dystopia4
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Location: Canada
PostPosted: Thu May 22, 2014 4:33 pm 
 

^those were really good, bro

Haven't written lyrics in a few months, so I'm a bit rusty. Hope these are alright:

A cascade of viscera tumbled down the encampment
A blanket of carrion draped over the landscape
A reckless sense of abandon careened through the air
Discrete silhouettes rode with violence in their hearts
To slay the lesser

Trudging forth to a bleak haze of violence
With the marrow sucked dry from the land
The sun beating death into our lungs
Unbridled desecration, unwavering fear
Crimson-stained cottonwoods uttered a death groan
As desecrators of life were lauded as heroes
Under the thread-bare veil of bravery
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BURlAL
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Joined: Fri May 21, 2010 11:32 pm
Posts: 216
PostPosted: Wed Jun 04, 2014 1:44 am 
 

Wrong

I know this is wrong
Her eyes fill with dread
I should not do this
The sickness must be fed
Know that you are not my first
But you also wont be the last
Her tears will quench my thirst
Veins pumping with adrenaline
Wearing a sickly grin
I want you to watch me
Carve a hole into her chest
Pulsating warm and wet
Hot blood trickling down
Dripping from your breasts
I stick a finger in
And smear it all around
My body begins to quiver
Its gushing on the ground
Now youre mine forever

Obsession
Perversion

screaming
Laughing

Save me
Love me

As the last breath
Slips from your cold lips
Know that I am not finished
with your body yet...

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BURlAL
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Posts: 216
PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2014 2:18 am 
 

Any feedback on any of my lyrics brahs? Im actually planning a project in the distant future.

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awheio
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Location: United States
PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2014 5:28 am 
 

I find those lyrics juvenile. The rhymes are generally predictable and excessively simplistic. The flow in general feels clumsy to me, and I find nothing interesting in the theme. It is unoriginal and quite shallow, as far as I can tell. I like to see somewhat more thought-provoking elements on the thematic end, but maybe you don't -- and that would be okay.

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BURlAL
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Posts: 216
PostPosted: Tue Jun 24, 2014 11:49 pm 
 

awheio wrote:
I find those lyrics juvenile. The rhymes are generally predictable and excessively simplistic. The flow in general feels clumsy to me, and I find nothing interesting in the theme. It is unoriginal and quite shallow, as far as I can tell. I like to see somewhat more thought-provoking elements on the thematic end, but maybe you don't -- and that would be okay.


That last one? Yea it wasn't the best, lol, but Ive posted several all together.

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awheio
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Posts: 289
Location: United States
PostPosted: Wed Jun 25, 2014 5:03 pm 
 

Yeah I might have to check out the previous ones too. I just wanted to start participating in this thread, but it looks less active than I thought! And people seem in general more positive than I'm used to, so I'm sorry if I started with a more critical stance haha.

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BURlAL
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Joined: Fri May 21, 2010 11:32 pm
Posts: 216
PostPosted: Wed Jun 25, 2014 8:40 pm 
 

awheio wrote:
Yeah I might have to check out the previous ones too. I just wanted to start participating in this thread, but it looks less active than I thought! And people seem in general more positive than I'm used to, so I'm sorry if I started with a more critical stance haha.

No problem man at least it was a comment.

Yea this thread isn't too active and in general don't get much constructive criticism.

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Thiestru
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Joined: Thu Oct 09, 2008 9:18 am
Posts: 1185
Location: United States
PostPosted: Mon Jul 14, 2014 4:20 pm 
 

I've never posted in here before, but what the hell. These are some new ones I just wrote called 'The Wayward'.

The atmosphere had long departed
When the drowned came up for air
You couldn’t see beyond your darkness
I needed you, and you weren’t there.

I never met somebody so damn changeful as you
Every time I look you’re never the same
The wind will lose direction if a star flickers out
And the arrow will go wide of its aim

You’ll never understand because you’re willfully blind
Your ears won’t see the sound, nor the eyes hear the light
Keep looking all you want, but you never will find
And the wrong will never turn to a right.

There is beauty in heartache
And you kill what you love
The earth has always turned the same way
All that’s worthwhile is at stake
And it won’t be enough
If we don’t mean the things that we say

I am begging to you now
With all of my heart
Don’t leave me out in the rain
I’m clinging to the torch
But I’m falling apart
If you don’t let me inside again.
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Syntek wrote:
Experienced a pretty great loss recently, and wrote this to keep me company, I guess:

Footprints from where I ran away,
Gave sake enough to feel alone.
I wandered lorn acres for days,
Unable to find my way back home.

Fleeting dreams light my path,
That long for the warmth of skin again.
Though my bones may split, my spirit break,
I endure - the circle remains.


Hey man, I really liked those. I feel them in my heart. Great job!
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Ghoul_Skool
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Fri Dec 21, 2007 9:28 am
Posts: 14
PostPosted: Thu Jul 17, 2014 3:26 pm 
 

Old school heavy metal lyrics:
Screw School, Screw In School




Me and the teacher we never got along
Me and the boys yousee kept planting bombs
Seems to me it was against the rule
To just have fun and play it cool


So when I think about the schools I've seen
I wanna get down on my heels and kneel
Shout out a primal cry, electrifyin' *loud electronic drum crash* the crimson sky:


Screeew school, screw iiin school
Maybe the teacher m'am will join in too
Screeew school, screw iiin school
Gonna blow it all to p-p-p-p-pieces when she blow my fuuuse

*guitar solo with bomb sounds and moaning*

Screeew school, screw iiin school
Maybe the teacher m'am will join in too
Screeew school, screw iiin school
Gonna blow it all to p-p-p-p-pieces when she blow my fuuuse


I'm gettin F in behavin but A in liviiiiiiiiiiin
*final explosion*

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altars_of_madness
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Mon Jul 21, 2014 9:58 pm
Posts: 9
Location: Mexico
PostPosted: Wed Jul 23, 2014 6:49 pm 
 

The son of Asterion
Looks with hate
As tears fall
Through my eyes.

Oh why lord?
Why did you
Abandoned me.

Oh why?
Was I left alone
In this lands.

Minotaur
Bringer of death
Minotaur
Servant of hell.

Minotaur
Evil Unchained
Minotaur
Hear my Prayers.

I can’t live
In this bloody hell
I can’t breath
This poisoned air.

Nowhere to run
Nowhere to hide
My punishment’s due
I’ll have to pay the price.

Oh why lord?
Why did you
Abandoned me.

Oh why?
Was I left alone
In this lands.

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altars_of_madness
Mallcore Kid

Joined: Mon Jul 21, 2014 9:58 pm
Posts: 9
Location: Mexico
PostPosted: Wed Jul 23, 2014 7:12 pm 
 

Thiestru wrote:
I've never posted in here before, but what the hell. These are some new ones I just wrote called 'The Wayward'.

The atmosphere had long departed
When the drowned came up for air
You couldn’t see beyond your darkness
I needed you, and you weren’t there.

I never met somebody so damn changeful as you
Every time I look you’re never the same
The wind will lose direction if a star flickers out
And the arrow will go wide of its aim

You’ll never understand because you’re willfully blind
Your ears won’t see the sound, nor the eyes hear the light
Keep looking all you want, but you never will find
And the wrong will never turn to a right.

There is beauty in heartache
And you kill what you love
The earth has always turned the same way
All that’s worthwhile is at stake
And it won’t be enough
If we don’t mean the things that we say

I am begging to you now
With all of my heart
Don’t leave me out in the rain
I’m clinging to the torch
But I’m falling apart
If you don’t let me inside again.


Great lyrics. I really liked them, very emotional and touching

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Thiestru
Metalhead

Joined: Thu Oct 09, 2008 9:18 am
Posts: 1185
Location: United States
PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2014 5:48 pm 
 

Thanks man, I appreciate that. Cheers. :)
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Destroyer_6_6_6
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Joined: Thu Nov 10, 2011 12:03 am
Posts: 10
Location: United States
PostPosted: Wed Aug 06, 2014 7:11 pm 
 

Title: Beyond the Wall of Sleep

(Inspired by HP Lovecraft)

Amidst in an elysian realm, dwelling not as a stranger
Each sight, every sound becoming genuine and familiar
The dimness of the macrocosm illuminates in fiery glow
Showing me the splendors beyond the world's cursed orders

Penetrate
Annihilate
Beyond the wall of sleep

This is an hour of approaching triumph
As I pursue a cursed oppressor
Creator of divine illusions
Oppressor of the self
The entity they kneel to within earthly confines
In ascension to astral paths, my ravaged sight burst
Into a spectacle of ultimate beauty

May these frosty chilling winds carry me
As I penetrate through the wall of sleep
I shall be free to kill the oppressor
In pursuit past the hither stars of eternity
Through star clustered regions and wormholes
To the very confines of infinity
Let these winds guide me to my adversary's throne
Where my sword shall put an end to thee!

Beyond the wall of sleep
I shall destroy thee
Beyond the wall of sleep
Into a shining plane of ethereal light
Tonight I go as nemesis
Bearing cataclysmic vengeance

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baconboom
Metal newbie

Joined: Thu Oct 24, 2013 1:33 pm
Posts: 33
Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Sun Aug 10, 2014 1:49 pm 
 

Destroyer_6_6_6 wrote:
Title: Beyond the Wall of Sleep

(Inspired by HP Lovecraft)

Amidst in an elysian realm, dwelling not as a stranger
Each sight, every sound becoming genuine and familiar
The dimness of the macrocosm illuminates in fiery glow
Showing me the splendors beyond the world's cursed orders

Penetrate
Annihilate
Beyond the wall of sleep

This is an hour of approaching triumph
As I pursue a cursed oppressor
Creator of divine illusions
Oppressor of the self
The entity they kneel to within earthly confines
In ascension to astral paths, my ravaged sight burst
Into a spectacle of ultimate beauty

May these frosty chilling winds carry me
As I penetrate through the wall of sleep
I shall be free to kill the oppressor
In pursuit past the hither stars of eternity
Through star clustered regions and wormholes
To the very confines of infinity
Let these winds guide me to my adversary's throne
Where my sword shall put an end to thee!

Beyond the wall of sleep
I shall destroy thee
Beyond the wall of sleep
Into a shining plane of ethereal light
Tonight I go as nemesis
Bearing cataclysmic vengeance

These lyrics are very good. They create a mysterious and otherworldly atmosphere. I don't think they need any improvement at all.
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Destroyer_6_6_6
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Location: United States
PostPosted: Mon Aug 11, 2014 3:36 pm 
 

Thanks! I have many of them with this type of atmosphere. At the same time I try to avoid many lyrical concepts that are used too much like satanism or anti-christianity. This song can be interpreted as anti-christian but I didn't make it a typical anti-christian lyric.

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baconboom
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Joined: Thu Oct 24, 2013 1:33 pm
Posts: 33
Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Tue Aug 12, 2014 3:16 pm 
 

Destroyer_6_6_6 wrote:
Thanks! I have many of them with this type of atmosphere. At the same time I try to avoid many lyrical concepts that are used too much like satanism or anti-christianity. This song can be interpreted as anti-christian but I didn't make it a typical anti-christian lyric.

There are so many bands with satanic/anti-christian lyrics and they just seem unimaginative and boring.
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Destroyer_6_6_6
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Joined: Thu Nov 10, 2011 12:03 am
Posts: 10
Location: United States
PostPosted: Tue Sep 02, 2014 12:21 am 
 

Katzen Sind Krieg wrote:
Screwing around in school the other day, not particularly in the mood to do actual work, and wrote this.

Standing at the ruins, I fell the connection
To the dissolved skies of another time
Infinite collapse on the event horizon
Decaying, retreat to grey

The sky is descending, the curtain falls
As we erode into our sempiternal origins
But as we go, we leave our trace
For the future to unravel

These buildings are monochrome. A subtle reminder of man's mortality.
These buildings are dead. To the winds of time we begrudgingly submit.
These buildings are crumbling. We are absorbed in thought, finite and penultimate.

At the ruins, I cross the gate
Bearing a portal to an elder era's dimensiom
Bereft of the burdens placed on the Earth
Transcendent, in a state of dissonant peace

This is my home, in the distance
So far away from the modern life
The blood-carrier skies I left behind
In favor of solitude

These buildings are monochrome. A subtle reminder of man's mortality.
These buildings are dead. To the winds of time we begrudgingly submit.
These buildings are crumbling. We are absorbed in thought, finite and penultimate.

The remnants of the preceding age are my home
In the tranquil monochrome, I find release
Death is ethereal, craft of legends
And with it I am one.


These lyrics are very impressive! I really like the heavily atmospheric aura the words create. The topic it deals with is very interesting too; the idea of our human world being very mundane compared to something beyond it, a domain of peace and solitude. Those last four lines will be very memorable.

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bluwarguy
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Joined: Sun Jan 12, 2014 11:43 pm
Posts: 35
Location: United States
PostPosted: Wed Sep 03, 2014 11:43 am 
 

This is a doom metal song I wrote... It's based off of a kinda depressing story in the Pokémon anime. I know it kinda sucks but it's a rough draft...

Ghost Of Maiden's Peak

The ocean waves crash against the pier.
Waited there for two thousand years.
After long she turned to stone.
Waiting for her love to come home.

Staring at the ocean,
stone eyes glistening.
Standing in her lonesome,
she is listening.

Love was sent off to a war.
And so she stands, filled with mourn.
Though stone, her heart forever yearned.
For he was never to return.

Staring at the ocean,
stone eyes glistening.
Standing in her lonesome,
she is listening.

(Solo)

Staring at the ocean,
stone eyes glistening.
Standing in her lonesome,
she is listening.

She still walks among us.
Ghost of Maiden’s peak.
Standing in her lonesome,
She is listening.

(Criticism needed please)
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