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deplo
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 23, 2013 12:07 pm 
 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rV1ww_iBmW0

Nothing too serious, just gathered some new ideas together and threw them in this instrumental. What do you guys think? This is home-recorded and the drum machine is just for demonstration.

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themicrulah
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 23, 2013 2:03 pm 
 

I like this. My critique would only be to focus more on strengthening your riffs and overall guitar playing - but you've definitely got something here, friend.
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deplo
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 02, 2013 4:48 am 
 

Thanks man, yeah I am still learning...

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themicrulah
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 02, 2013 8:55 am 
 

Well you certainly have potential and a sense of what it means to write a song! :)
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Apteronotus
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 02, 2013 11:58 am 
 

Expanding on what THEMICRULAH wrote, I think the lead guitar work especially could use some tightening up. It felt really loose and kind of strained with the notes, something that will naturally improve over time.
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